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Ethern
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0 posted 2012-11-29 09:45 PM



in this fog
i lose my vision
to stumble
in the mist.

terrible,
this darkness.
so, "ignorance
is bliss"?

in the valley
of the shadow,
even gray shades
seem to glow.

truth is
so obscure.
i believe,
but do not know.

the candlelight
dies quickly
as it flickers
in the drafts

of night winds
after sunset
when the time
for work is past.

© Copyright 2012 Derrick E. Gillum - All Rights Reserved
Victoria
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1 posted 2012-11-30 11:04 AM


Walking in the fog...Im sure that is true. Nicely done Ethern.Enjoyed

~V~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

JL
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2 posted 2012-11-30 05:47 PM


Very well expressed.
I've often wondered how
sight might be obscured
by a cataract.

Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2012-12-01 08:18 PM


Enjoyed...James
Ethern
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4 posted 2012-12-01 08:24 PM


because of your signature JL, i speculate that you are a man of some faith, so it may interest you that this poem is actually depicting a personal experience of doubt and confusion, and not a literal cataract.

thanks for the recognition and affirmation everyone.

Victoria
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5 posted 2012-12-01 08:43 PM


I read your explanation to J. I thought you might be describing something other then a cataract. I suppose when one is confused about anything its like walking in a fog.
Ethern
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6 posted 2012-12-02 04:56 AM


much of my poetry is allegory and is meant to be interpreted figuratively. like many others, this piece was forged in a furnace of tumultuos mental perplexity fueled by religious contentions.

[This message has been edited by Ethern (12-02-2012 06:29 AM).]

Pilgrimage
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7 posted 2012-12-02 04:26 PM


I enjoyed this.  I know what it's like to believe, but to have to pray, 'help thou my unbelief'--sometimes you wonder.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Ethern
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8 posted 2012-12-03 10:49 AM


how many times have i prayed that!

luminosity
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9 posted 2012-12-04 10:54 AM


my husband and I often have deep discussions about faith...it seems the very definition of faith lends to confusion, at best it is a decision and a determination to keep ones mind turned in that direction...
now I am laughing at my lengthy reply, here I came to compliment the brevity and ended up out wording you lol

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