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Lady Goodman
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since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

0 posted 2012-11-05 09:47 PM

She found the letter
in the book
glued to a page
where she had looked
every day for years.
Rheumatic fingers trembling
she peeled the parchment's
memory
and she exhaled her urgency

she shook the book

as ashes fell

into her lap

eternity--

her love, her life, the cost.

Ethern
Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 150
on a plane

1 posted 2012-11-05 10:43 PM

great read. skillful write.

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

2 posted 2012-11-06 12:15 PM

So much in so few words. deep and lovely and sad. jo

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2012-11-06 02:13 AM

Karen, this is beyond exquisite, written with your inimitable excellence, and in my humble opinion, one of your very best, possibly, your very best! It is an example of minimalist description, yet paradoxically pounding with detail, and years of imagery and emotions culminating in a dénoument par excellence (how unFrench it is of me to use the same descriptive word a second time, so soon after the first – but excellence is a word that I find impossible to avoid in describing your poetry). This poem is what poetry should be – and if ever there was a perfect poem, this is it.

Owl

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2012-11-06 04:02 AM

Excellent and meaningful piece, my friend.
Much enjoyed the red.

jimmy

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

5 posted 2012-11-06 04:39 AM

I've been writing for days to present this--to you all--so if it pleased you I can go to bed pleased.

I hope that it did--I just smoked my second-to-last cigarette---which gives me one to have with coffee when I wake.

For shame--I love my nicotine and memories, so thank you for popping in to read this one.

And Diana? You are so very generous. I'd be a liar if I said I didn't blush and feel good while reading your reply.

You make me feel good about writing. You all do.

xxox

My love to you all.

I should go to bed, huh? Nod.

Tuck me in.

G'nite.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-11-06 06:55 AM

Something overlooked all these years fell into her lap with grace and forbearance rekindling something good, oh, ever so good.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

7 posted 2012-11-06 05:02 PM

Thank you Jerry.

This is just a smidge of seven or eight pages of scribbles...knowing my tendency to throw everything on a page, I just lifted one or two phrases out of that mess and this is what came out.

I should edit more often?

I hope you're well and happy m'friend.

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

8 posted 2012-11-07 09:28 AM

A mood of dark romance well done.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2012-11-07 09:47 PM

Nice

Poppy
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since 2012-11-08

Posts 2
UK

10 posted 2012-11-08 10:54 AM

My first read since joining and what a beautiful piece this is.

Skill fully written, I like the imagery you have captured here.

Much enjoyed.

Poppy ~xx~

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

11 posted 2012-11-08 06:04 PM

Ah, Poppy, I am honored then. And welcome to Passions in Poetry!

and just waving my gratitude to you all yet again.

I'd say I missed writing but I never really stopped. I did miss the encouragement of you all very much, however.

Writing can be very lonely business, and posting my offerings and getting feedback enhances me personally. The writing seems to stay the same though.

I love and appreciate you all much. And again, welcome Poppy

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

12 posted 2012-11-08 06:05 PM

Hit a wrong button on a lengthy reply (Windows 7 again--I don't seem to be adapting very well)

Special welcome hugs to Poppy! And my continued gratitude to you all.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

13 posted 2012-11-11 07:03 PM

Great "Karen style" here. Love it.
Ida

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

14 posted 2012-11-12 12:42 PM

True romance in this one.Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

15 posted 2012-11-13 06:54 AM

As usual. I'm late getting to this... (working a million hours a weeks has that effect I guess) but I'm glad I didn't miss it all together. You still got it when it counts, Karen. Love the ashes falling/landing in the lap, and the effect of it.

Michael

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

16 posted 2012-11-18 08:35 PM

very compelling story

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

17 posted 2012-11-19 10:59 AM

"she peeled the parchment's
memory
and she exhaled her urgency"

Excellent write! Your emotion was felt throughout the entire read but this line was exceptional. Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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