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soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2012-11-01 10:18 AM


Wasting Time

She descended the night
with Art Nouveau gypsy feathers
and a far too lethal pout
the talk between us
is a pretty gun cooling inside
still loaded with fear and doubt

Well she pulled down a dusted star
from the cloudy sky shelf
one to remember him
to remember when she was still just herself
and he cut down a nightly tress
and decorated her with flames
burned to the point of wearing thin
to be wearing that awkward love just like a frame

And she pulled up through the night
when it became too intense
too much wasted time
wasted like hearts too drunk to make sense
and he ripped up a daily dream
and reacquainted with the dawn
sad to the point of flying blind
to be flying those wider skies just like a song

She ascended the light
with Art Deco body secrets
and a cagy bluebird eye
the talk between us
is a waking sun wasting time
shades coded red in every sigh

Well she pulled down a lusted star
from the shimmer sky dome
one to consider him
to consider this a remedy to dreaming alone
and he cut down a nightly mess
and stumbled through the ennui
useless to the point of giving in
to be giving that awkward love not entirely for free

And she descended the night
with Art Nouveau gypsy feathers
and a far too lethal pout
the walk between us
is a sacred gap never to be crossed
infinity seas like dreams, the cork is tossed
the bottle broken on hopes
within, without
cannons ablaze and I'm still loaded
I'm still loaded with this streak of fear and doubt

Too much wasted time
wasted on hearts too drunk to make much sense
and I slipped on a lazy dream
and repositioned the dawn
sad to the point of broken rhyme
to be broke and floating skies just like a song
just like a song

"I will hang on the hook of your splendor" -Snow Patrol, 'Dark Roman Wine'

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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2012-11-02 03:39 AM


Whew!  I am totally drunk on this – my head is spinning faster than a child’s toy wooden top, first his way then hers in quick succession!  What a magnificent outpouring of 19th century dark passions!  I will have to read this again . . . and again . . . and again . . . . to drink the last dregs of its intricacy, and I will, because I don’t want to miss a drop.  I love the way you blend into the ‘he’.  Every word, every image, every artistic splendour, of this is perfect, and that ending . . . oh, that ending . . .   This has to be your chef-d’œuvre of all time!

And to think that because of a lack of time, I nearly didn’t read “Wasting Time” – how enrichened I nearly wasn’t!  Ouch!  Thank you!  Wow!  More wow!  I hate that you have to feel that way, but oh looooooooooook what you created with the experience!

Owl

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
2 posted 2012-12-04 03:06 PM


Your poetry always takes me to a good place.  There is so much human emotion that I can identify with, and your choice of words is uncanny!  You are a fine writer soul drifter and I adore reading you.

Happy Holidays to you, good poet~  

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2012-12-14 07:24 PM


Very nice...just like a song...James
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