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Dawn Brink
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since 2011-04-28
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South Africa

0 posted 2012-10-31 04:25 AM


Your name is a restlessness, a stabbing pain, an unforgettable warmth.
I've tried to forget (I'm trying), and yet each time I hear your name I
burn and memories overwhelm me.

I wish I could see you and smile and we'd
be friends, old friends, good friends.
But we've kissed and touched and cared and I've maybe even loved you,
so when I see you I burn.

One day when I'm in love again and
free again, then on that day we'll smile (and maybe laugh about today),
but for today, I'm burning and I'm crying and
when I see you, I want to run (both into your arms and from your arms).

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2012-10-31 07:22 AM


I understand the sensations you describe herein with the sweet/sour poem of an ex-lover. The hurt lingers for a long time.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Victoria
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since 2000-08-12
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2 posted 2012-10-31 08:55 AM


Its hard to become a friend to an ex lover going from calling one darling to calling him by his first name. I would rather move on. Nicely written.

~Victoria~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2012-11-10 12:33 PM


I guess thats why they call it love...love wants to live on even when it has to change addresses...James
Dawn Brink
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since 2011-04-28
Posts 44
South Africa
4 posted 2012-11-13 10:57 AM


Thank you all for your feedback! Much appreciated.
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