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Open Poetry #48

A Mother's Hopes

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

0 posted 2012-10-29 11:34 AM

As grieving mothers wept,
the unbroken promises
had been kept.
Their sons and daughters
were coming home.

Tho, they do not suffer
in their sleep,
when placed,
in an earthen bed,

while overhead,
the cold wind blows,
on ground,
where they had bled.

Nature's cover
of earth and stone,
no more,
will keep the bodies warm.

Nor, will the memory,
of that war,
once fought on barren fields,
where the hopes, of Afghan poppies,
will no longer grow.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-10-29 12:25 PM

Dark. Darker. Excellent.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2012-10-29 02:52 PM

Achingly, sensitively sad, RV, but very beautiful. It is excruciatingly painful for a mother to lose a child, whether by death or any other means.

while overhead,
the cold wind blows,
on ground,
where they had bled.

and

Nor, will the memory,
of that war,
once fought on barren fields,
where the hopes, of Afghan poppies,
will no longer grow.

are the most poignant stanzas for me.

Owl

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2012-10-30 12:41 PM

Fine writing...James

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

4 posted 2012-10-30 10:32 AM

Jerry, Diana and James appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on the poem... "A Mother's Hopes".

luminosity
Senior Member

since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

5 posted 2012-11-08 05:06 PM

ah, some forget that each war time 'statistic' has a 'mother' this poem beautifully portrays that love

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

6 posted 2012-11-08 05:17 PM

Sad but beautifully done, R V WOOO.
iDA

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2012-11-08 05:42 PM

Makes you wonder sometimes, why keeping promises is a good thing. Well done, it made me sad, and made me think.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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