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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-10-16 07:07 AM

You are the echo of my heart,
Reflecting to me your deep pain,
Reliving your hell, à la carte,
Your sunshine always turns to rain.
I have taken it on my own,
To lighten some of your suffering,
And I have listened to your moans,
Tried to lessen some of your stings.
You were kind to me I confess,
You gave me what I'd never had,
Our love was raw, without finesse,
And then guilt made it all go bad.
Our future doesn't look so grand,
It matters not, for here I stand.

©October 15, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

r v wooo
Senior Member

since 2007-08-07

Posts 656

1 posted 2012-10-16 11:37 AM

Compassion...the give and take...you have expressed it well...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-10-16 11:49 AM

Thank you, r v, for reading and commenting on my poetry, I appreciate it.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2012-10-16 01:13 PM

I agree with RV my friend and the last two lines especially...

j.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-10-16 01:21 PM

Appreciate it, J, thanks.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 2012-10-18 11:02 PM

"And then guilt made it all go bad." Been there! And guilt is sneaky too, you never see it sneaking up on you, then wham! You're leveled by it.

Here's where I get th "throw" you. For all the pesimism I saturate these boards with, for all the woe in my life I exaggerate to no end, I do believe it matters. It [i]all[/all] matters. I won't get philosophical on you any more than to say it mattered enough to you to write about it... and that should be enough. We are shaped into who we are by what matters to us.

Loved the poem btw.

Michael

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-10-19 07:57 AM

Appreciate the read and comments, Michael. Your philosophical viewpoint was well received. Thanks for being here.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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