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Open Poetry #48

Eleven PM Mist

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2012-10-09 10:50 PM

Eleven PM Mist

Standing on the street corner
bathed in artificial sunlight
from the all-night street lamp

smelling gutter stench of old leaves
and two dead rats

listening to hungry howls of an
alley-Tom (remembering my own Tom once
called Mr.), and even this alley-Mr.
though hunger stricken
passes by the rancid rats.

Mist comes in, cooling my face
after April’s warm afternoon

but now chill sets in,
in the eleven p.m. mist,
this cold and
chilling eleven p.m. mist.

Wish to go home, do I.

But then beggars would ride horses
with silk manes.

Eleven p.m. mist blankets my body,
my body,
not thin,
not fat,
not in-between

anything

if I sleep tonight, only my spirit
will stay to be cooled by
the eleven p.m. mist.

~*~

Circa April, 1970
©KRJ
17 October 1999
revised
15 March 2002
refined 10-9-12

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2012-10-10 12:29 PM

I do like this. That Eleven PM mist can be so beguiling and so lonely. I kind of feel like this when I watch the Northern Lights.

xoxoxo
Ali

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-10-10 05:53 AM

You hit the nail square on the head with this creepy one, Karilea. Creepy to me because anything with "mist" involved in it, is creepy.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2012-10-10 06:36 AM

I love this!
Reminds me of standing watch;
with a little chill welcoming a
cup of hot coffee; all the sounds
amplified, right down to my squeaky boots.

So enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2012-10-10 08:24 AM

powerful 'penning' !

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