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Sunshine
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0 posted 2012-10-05 01:47 PM





Gift of Hand

Palm up, take my hand
With thy promise of grand dreams
Entwine these fingers


and if you were
to believe in me,
what might the treasures
be that we uncover…

like Adam and Eve
anew to the sense
of love's first kiss
would we know then
Eden's bliss…

all gifts I would gift to you
for I see pleasure
in your smile, I see
walks of many miles,
I see...
fantasy

in the gifts I
give to thee

Bless me with your
smile, take me in
your embrace,
grant me
the kiss of you,
from your princely face

thus your gift
you give to me

Tender touch of hand
Strength in awesome love's command ~
God, sweet mercy's touch


chide me not for
these my dreams
but carry me forth
on tide of beams
bear me up high
to the clouds
transport me up,
to the land of proud

for you would have
this all of me
this I give
most graciously
cans't thou see
the truth of me
in these,
thy words of
love

Ah my dear,
dear heart,
come and take
my hand,
it reaches for you,
cross this chasm wide
nay I can not, will not hide
this smile upon my lip,
but would feel thee with
this, my fingertip

when

Palm up, take mine hand
As grand is our promised dream
Entwined forever



~*~

12-29-00
revised slightly
12-30-02


© Copyright 2012 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Richy
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1 posted 2012-10-05 01:53 PM


enchanting my dear friend

wonderfully you


JerryPat2
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2 posted 2012-10-05 02:46 PM


quote:
and if you were
to believe in me,
what might the treasures
be that we uncover…

These four lines size up this lovely poem perfectly. Your reaching out with Palm up is such a beautiful vision you have given the reader. This poem is mystical in its continuing quest for another hand to clasp your Palm up . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Marchmadness
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3 posted 2012-10-05 05:12 PM


Well writteb. Full of beauty and grace, Sunshine.
                           ida

jwesley
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4 posted 2012-10-05 09:45 PM


Guess I didn't see this first time around ... sure glad I did this time ...

very much enjoyed.

j.

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5 posted 2012-10-05 10:05 PM


What a gift - filled with beauty and love. Thank you for posting this, dear Sunshine.  You make my heart smile.

xooxo
Alison

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6 posted 2012-10-06 01:39 AM


so sweet and delightful, give enchantment to heart, thanks a lot,


yann


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7 posted 2012-10-06 04:32 PM


beautifully penned dear Poetess
thank you for sharing

VAS
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8 posted 2012-10-09 10:32 PM


I've not seen haiku coupled with prosaic poetry before, it was a pleasant experience

I adored the haiku interludes greatly, but all was wonderful to read...the epitome of "Sunshine" I'd say.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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9 posted 2012-10-09 10:39 PM


Beautifully you in aces and lace and full of grace.


   lori  

JL
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10 posted 2012-10-10 05:37 AM


Wow...
A beautiful poem from a loving heart.
This is really nice.


JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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