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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2012-10-02 09:00 PM

Where Winters Come

The park is a place
of overhanging trees
with sidewalks
leading to benches
covered by leaf-made canopies.

Sidewalks
smoothed by slow-walking lovers
trying not to stop
and grasp and hold . . .
-ing hands tightly squeezed.

Sidewalks
where running feet
step on tears
when grasp and hold . . .
-ing hands
lose their grip.

The park
is you and I
a night of memories
in the grass

just before . . . goodbye.

The park -
where winters come.

© wesley james beard, jr.
september, 2012

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-10-02 09:37 PM

[quote}just before . . . goodbye.

The park -
where winters come[/quote]

The ending of this, with a goodbye and the chill of the winter tell the whole story of the poem. Nostalgic and sad, but even so, memories, sad or not have some redeeming value. At least you wrote the poem about it.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

2 posted 2012-10-02 11:11 PM

Great visualization.
That park comes alive as this unfolds.
Love the memories in the grass.

Enjoyed, j.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2012-10-02 11:24 PM

Thank you Jerry and JL. Always enjoy hearing from you.

j.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2012-10-03 01:59 PM

Lovely write, Jimmy.
Ida

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2012-10-06 12:05 PM

Wonderful. I really like your style.

Alison

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2012-10-06 04:58 PM

Your poetry is so life like, it sways me in the nicest ways.

Great stuff, jw~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

7 posted 2012-10-06 05:12 PM

Lovely, Jimmy.

Owl

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2012-10-06 06:30 PM

ahhh i really liked this one buddy Wes..

your poetry is even better then i remember last time i came through these parts..

your a good man my friend, im really enjoying your stories

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2012-10-07 12:52 PM

delicious ,wesley,musical and and exquisite ending, thanks for the moving read,

yann

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

10 posted 2012-10-08 10:32 PM

Thanks everyone for the read and the comments -
more truth in this piece than I care to admit.

j.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

11 posted 2012-10-09 10:12 PM

touched my heart, especially the two different images of holding of hands.

relating the good-bye to winter's arrival very powerful

the tears on the sidewalk from the hands unclasping priceless

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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