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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2012-09-15 12:47 PM

She had her child on her back
the Louisiana strip
came off the sunset

as her jacket dressed
down the farmers land
acres of corn
strawberry fields
her black, midnight jacket
warmed the air
segueing into the fall of night

That hot strip of sun
like the olive branches
that watched over her
as a young girl
precocious, unimpeded
simply rubbing her skin
against the wild oak
as if her youth could read natures scope
and channel its history onto the palm of her hand

For her child on her back
whispered the soft echoes
of her mothers soft skin
the softest Louisiana,
the strip levying against the sun

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

1 posted 2012-09-15 08:23 AM

Tomer,
You have personified her beautifully! I must back to read this again. Your description is captivating!

Miscellanea

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-09-15 08:57 AM

quote:
simply rubbing her skin
against the wild oak
as if her youth could read natures scope
and channel its history onto the palm of her hand

Writing this from south Louisiana I can only say that there isn't one line in this poem which didn't give me great pleasure to read, but the lines I quoted, to me, were the best of them.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2012-09-15 10:46 AM

If I owned an art gallery, I would have one large hall for the Tomer paintings, and this one would have a prominent position.

Owl

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-09-15 04:54 PM

The vision you paint with your words is breath taking...I love it...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2012-09-16 12:19 PM

Misce-

Happy it translated to you...thank you for the warm feedback.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2012-09-16 09:58 AM

Jerry-

I'm happy I could take you back to the place you live...One day I hope to visit. Take care, my friend.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

7 posted 2012-09-16 10:00 AM

Owl-

As always, your responses always bring a smile. I'm happy you enjoyed it so very much. Take care

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

8 posted 2012-09-16 10:00 AM

Starttime-

Thanks for the support. I'm happy the poem brought forth such clarity. Take care

Cheers

Tomer

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2012-09-17 03:37 PM

simply rubbing her skin
against the wild oak
as if her youth could read natures scope
and channel its history onto the palm of her hand

I'm a Louisiana native... and love my home state. So often, I've watched or read as it was portrayed poorly... That isn't the case here. *S* Excellent write!!

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

10 posted 2012-09-17 04:30 PM

Suthern-

I wish to one day visit...it seems like a wonderful place.

I'm happy this piece resonated with you. All the best.

Cheers

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2012-09-17 10:39 PM

Enjoyed...James

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

12 posted 2012-09-17 11:51 PM

Happy you enjoyed, James.

Cheers

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