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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2012-08-24 03:05 PM


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On the platform
At the station

Morning
A red glow
In the air
The sun not yet
Risen in the sky

Your train
To arrive
In an hour

I have no idea
What to do

A single sparrow
Under wooden eaves

I should leave
As I should have
Long ago

I can feel
Another tragedy
Coming on

Yet here
I am


.

© Copyright 2012 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
1 posted 2012-08-24 04:56 PM


I like the way you write.This is so interesting; the beginnings of a "want to read book".
jo perry  

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
2 posted 2012-08-25 03:03 AM


You always leave us wanting more of your story, John.
                         Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2012-08-25 04:28 AM


Exactly my thoughts, with or without a train that is about to arrive ...

The mood is so perfectly rendered in this scenery.

Margherita

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
4 posted 2012-08-25 07:45 PM


nice, my friend, with feeling...

j.

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada
5 posted 2012-08-26 02:25 PM


WOW!! you have a talent to make a person create the vision...well done...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
6 posted 2012-08-27 07:22 PM


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Thank you all

There is a story a legend
now decades in the making
which I myself don't understand
being a deliberate man of reason

Yet as I have all this time
I am never the less going
to see if there's any light

Thanks again


John
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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2012-08-27 11:50 PM


Nice...James
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