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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2012-08-22 11:09 PM


Motorcycle Hit Man

He's a motorcycle hit man
thats what he does
everyday and everynight,
sometime he might
have you in his sight.
Picture this,
you stop at a red light
you lean over to place a kiss
upon your sweethearts lips
when a motorcycle pulls up
right along side
and he's pointing a forty-five
right at your head
and the lights still red,
what do you do,
I'll tell you what you do,
step all the way down
on your gas pedal
I don't care if
the lights red or green
pull away as fast as you can
while your lady screams
and ducks as quick as she can,
take a right as quick as Peter Pan
this is no time to prove you're a man,
now the motorcylce hit man
is mad as hell
luckily he didn't shoot you
but he's right on your tail
and he's still got that gun
lest you forget,
this time you'll get away
but the motorcycle hit man
will get you yet.

JamesLee
22August
2012



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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2012-08-23 03:04 AM


I enjoyed your poem, James.  Whilst I agree with you in one sense (about "now is not the time"), in my humble opinion, rushing away as fast as you can in these circumstances IS, in fact, proving you are a man - of wisdom, sense and especially of bravery in not being afraid to do what what is right and considerate and what to others with a smaller brain and less wisdom, common sense, logic and consideration would be very afraid to lose their macho image.

Owl

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2012-08-23 09:18 AM


Pull out your own weapon of choice and take his head off. You do have a weapon of your choice, don't you? Call it macho if you will, it gets you out of a situation, where if you run you'll just take the bullet in the back.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
3 posted 2012-08-23 02:09 PM


Well, James, I almost got out of breath for the intense suspense and feeling of danger you render in this poem.

Certainly remaining calm and act quickly seems wise, but we can only pray that this never ever happens to us. There are too many scaring people around.

I was once followed by a madman who didn't have a gun but showed with his fingers the intention of shooting at me, just because I had surpassed him. I still remember my effort to remain calm, trying to ignore him but driving as fast as possible to gain distance  ... one really never knows what can happen in the traffic.

You did a good job here.

Margherita

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada
4 posted 2012-08-23 08:16 PM


WOW!!!this poem is so filled with suspence it took my breath away...hopefully none of us will ever meet him...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2012-08-25 09:44 PM


Thank you Owl, Jerry, Margherita and Startime for the wonderful responses...I suppose I've been watching to many action movies lately, however a situation happened to me many years ago while driving North on the San Diego Freeway, I looked to my left and their was a young man driving along side me pointing a gun at me, I simply turned my head forward and kept driving, at that point he increased his speed rapidly and was gone...James
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