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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
They use to work along the waterfront with their strong, lanky arms dripping in sweat from the wet, august days They had these overalls on denim blue, slightly faded tan lines riding over their shoulder blades Their skin so tan as if they were offspring of the sun with their hands like stone rugged, rough Lines criss-crossing across their palm like the droves of grass that ran east and west from where they worked as the roosters crowed They ran with an easy feel no mention of mortgages or stacked bills, nothing like the city folk that anguished on the other side of town They shared a common bond a laughter that squelched the morning sun a simple life, where their hands met grace and nature divided by the earths infinite grace They shared the tree of life, together. [This message has been edited by Tomer (08-23-2012 08:22 PM).] |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
So far, Tomer, I have read this 3 times, very, very slowly to immerse myself in the scene, the images, the ambiance, the flavour. I am trying so hard not to say that this is your chef-d'oeuvre and my favourite of yours, because, no doubt, you will outdo yourself soon after this and prove me wrong on this one. Whilst my second-favourite part is the entire rest of the poem, I think my most favourite lines are: "as if they were offspring of the sun" and "a laughter that squelched the morning sun" and "where their hands met grace and nature" If Vincent van Gogh were alive and read this, I am sure he would be compelled instantly to paint what your readers see. Owl |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
This vision comes to life and rings true with me...a simple life is one that makes us free to laugh...I can't explain how much I love this poem...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Owl- If someone even in the same league as Van Gogh decided to do a painting based on my work, I think I would die a happy death. I'm happy those 3 lines resonated with you so much. There is a great pleasure in describing the real heart of America as opposed to the large, well known cities. Cheers Tomer |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
Starttime- I'm happy it touched you so much. Your comments are always appreciated. Cheers Tomer |
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