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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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I sharpened my teeth against the whetstone that was you you; showed me the strength of words in your soliloquy of past demons and magnificent mystification you co-opted destruction out of tranquility it was your other place the place of felonious intent I was led I was no naïve adolescent but your unending fire of passion with cleaving questions and oh, my how you constructed those questions demons made it a point to bivouac there clinging, forever clinging as did those who came before me I gnawed on the root of the procellous' tempest and succumbed wholly, totality and forever into your underground where you ripped the sleep from my soul I lived within your shadowy world stapled by your written words I'm lost forever inside the shards of your yesterday's dawn ©August 15, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (08-15-2012 05:49 PM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Intense read...very powerful. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate your thoughts, Ericc. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
WOW...intense is right...brilliant write...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Karen, thank you for your comments and thoughts. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Very powerful and passoniate poem. I always enjoy reading your poems. Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Kat, very much. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Such a captivating expression, Jerry! Very impressive work. Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I thank you very much, Margherita, for taking the time to read and respond to my poem. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
One of your best, Jerry. Powerful. A |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
That is high praise and I thank you, A. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Wow is right! Jerry this has a special edge to it that is brilliantly sharp,like a pair of black stilettos....Excellent Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Lori, I appreciate it. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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