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0 posted 2012-08-10 09:56 AM





To My Love

Mine sweetest heart ~
thy recent supplication
was not designed to cause
me lament, nor spill acrid tears, I know…

why does thou not
believe in thy fortune?

nay, question not thy father's
commands…

thou knowest I am to be yours
~ freely ~
but thine love is akin to
Sol
which belongs safe in the firmament

nay, thou should not seek me
for I shall come, and go ~
freely ~
I shall give thee rest between thy daily
caressings
with always this, mine promise, O love,
of quick return…

no reason can I give thee
for this, thy gift of heart
only to know that
we are to embrace these gifts ~
as our fathers knew from
the Wizard's own spoken words
this plan of unity!

What now! Woulds't thou turn
away from thy Wizard's plan? Nay,
my love, my liege, my lord…
nay…

not for us to question the powers
that have guided the stars
or that blow the wind ~
not for us to question the rise of
surf, nor to count the stars
in the firmament in Cimmerian night

for this cannot be done ~

to accept,
and accept in fine accord
the gift of thy fathers
for I shall and will come to thee
in certitude of thy desires

for cans't thou descry what
should be
e'en though 'tis said
dreams might not come to thee

nay, my love
this maiden is naught thy dream
but thy reality
if thee should covet this largess

and be thee this, my firmament,
in which I may rise, and shine
in thy countenance,
only to rest in thy soul….

I shall see thee
on the morrow
thee shall knoweth me
by the lightsome come
from mine eyes

to knoweth for once, and by God
that this blessing is yours.

Now, my love of heart,
I bid thee adieu,
till the morrow of our feasting day
when, wedded as one
united by bond
thou shall know me
as e'en thy might explore the
beat of thy heart
or take a breath to exist
thou shall know me.

Till the morrow….
thy eternity awaits….

01.21.1601



From the archives
(c) 1-21-2001 KRJ



© Copyright 2012 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-08-10 11:49 AM


Love this olde style poetry, Karilea. It gives you a chance to express yourself in a much warmer and clearer heartfelt way I think. The last two line were very effectively done.

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2 posted 2012-08-10 12:29 PM


this reminds me of an opera i just recently watched, except your poem was much much sweeter with a much lovelier ending
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3 posted 2012-08-10 02:19 PM


not for us to question the powers
that have guided the stars
or that blow the wind ~
not for us to question the rise of
surf, nor to count the stars
in the firmament in Cimmerian night

Simply gorgeous! *S*

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4 posted 2012-08-10 03:33 PM


Wonderfully written with classic beauty!
Startime1955
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5 posted 2012-08-10 04:42 PM


I absolute;y love this language...it flows with a magic the soul understands...this poem is now my most favorite...thank you...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JL
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6 posted 2012-08-10 11:18 PM


Your words spark a certain flame of poetic creativity.
This is filled with so much energy, and so well written.
Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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7 posted 2012-08-11 04:24 AM


I have read this beauty more than once and you really made me feel the ambiance of a love lived centuries ago. I tiptoed on the fragile tender ground of a secret passion expressed in words to accompany a lifetime and beyond.

Excellent.

Margherita

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8 posted 2012-08-16 10:11 PM


A pleasure...James
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9 posted 2012-08-17 08:37 AM


I enjoy the romance of old English ... the words are deeply felt. Very well done, Sunshine!
Ms. E

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10 posted 2012-08-17 09:10 AM


Very, very beautiful, Karilea, but . . . you wrote this in 1601???  Giggles, I think you meant - in fact, I know you meant - 2001!

Hugs
Owl

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11 posted 2012-08-17 09:41 AM


This is an absolutely beautiful, romantic poem, Karilea.
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12 posted 2012-08-17 09:47 AM


Diane, I think I was "channeled" from 1601...LOL...thanks for noticing!

And to everyone, I'm so glad you've enjoyed the journey.


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13 posted 2012-08-17 10:44 AM


Giggles, Karilea.  It makes it REALLY relevant, lol, except that your photo belies the fact that you are 411 years old!

Owl

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14 posted 2012-08-17 11:18 AM


Ah sweetie...just consider that I've been pickled in alcohol and it all works, right?


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15 posted 2012-08-21 10:56 AM


Ahhh the touch of an exquisite love, beautifully portrayed just beautiful. Love the flow and style it is just gorgeous. You have gifted us with beauty thank you honey this is a delight x  
Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy
x x x x x x x

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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16 posted 2012-08-21 11:55 AM


Read this again, about the 4th time since it was posted, and still find it just as beautiful...

Was surprised I hadn't commented on it yet . . .  though I do read a lot and just don't have the time to read & comment on as many.

j.

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17 posted 2012-08-22 11:03 PM


..so quite romantic and loving..indeed..!!! truly enjoyed..>>spiros

~~

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18 posted 2012-08-24 05:57 PM


Sunshine,

      Perfect in every way.   I am deeply touched by your
Soft words and powerful thoughts.

Hugs,
Cathy

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19 posted 2012-08-24 09:18 PM


I can only ditto what all the comments you've already received gal. But to write something like this about me is humbling. LOL...you still have that knack for expressions gal...
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