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muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

0 posted 2012-08-09 03:42 PM

Slumbering hope, awakens.
You hid in the lull of silence,
quietly, quietly behind the walls.
Though I hear you whisper no words are formed;
just the imaginings of poetry eroding
from pages fluttering in the wind.
A blank dairy whose pages I've caressed
to trace a hair, a scent or fibre of your existence
and to believe in a song, never written there.
Your invisible voice, beckoning for reprieve.
It’s a story that's ageless, born from creation
by two lovers shapeless in form
and always changing, as whimsy
lost in echoes of fairy tales
where every ending leads me to You.

duet by Dawn Smith and Brian Madden (August 10, 2012)

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-08-09 04:01 PM

Wonderfully constructed with the soulfulness apparent in almost every line. "A blank dairy whose pages I've caressed," is such a great line, but then this poem has many such in-depth lines. I enjoyed.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2012-08-09 04:05 PM

Enchanting verse, dear Dawn, beautifully penned by you two. Magic vibrates through the lines.

Margherita

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2012-08-09 04:15 PM

A beauty...
I agree with the above sentiment expressed by Jerry and Margherita.

Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

4 posted 2012-08-09 04:30 PM

Thank you everyone, it is a shaky return to writing and I am blessed to have Brian hold my hand through it.

i appreciate your comments very much

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2012-08-09 04:36 PM

I love duets...
thank you for sharing! Say hey to Bri for me!

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

6 posted 2012-08-09 04:44 PM

Sunshine, I will definitely tell him hi for you! maybe he will come here for a visit (fingers crossed)

brian thomas madden
Junior Member

since 2010-07-08

Posts 32
Ireland (between an ocean and a rock)

7 posted 2012-08-09 05:34 PM

thanks to everyone for their kind words, and Hi to Sunshine. And I also want to thank Dawn who is an inspiration not only in her words but in her spirit.

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

8 posted 2012-08-09 10:06 PM

The magic in this duet is stunning...it captures my heart and wove a dream...delightful...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2012-08-10 12:52 PM

Ms Muted...lovely blend here...sensual samba

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