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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2012-08-04 06:28 AM


So that gypsy lady broke up her camp
and braved the mountain of love’s attributes
and she overcame all obstacles
on her way to that far away peak.

She planted herself for a moment or two
in the soil of emotion and knowledge
to feel the wind of celebration
blow happily through her hair.

Of course she knew as everyone does
that peaks are and will always be
opposed to life’s dictates
that decree an abode on flat level ground.

But for that one moment or two
how glorious it was to be free
and speak the words of love’s honesty
even if unto the deaf.

Step by step she retraced her steps
with more baggage than ever before
until at the midway stage she stopped
to dispense with the feel and knowing.

But the wind had followed her every move
waiting to pick up her discards
and push them along behind her
to make light weight of her memory.

And how like the wind to pick up speed
and deposit it all at her feet
to trip her up, again, again,
on her journey to flat level ground.

She’s not there yet; she loiters in caves
in attempts to escape the wind
that whirls and swirls her discards
at her one and only exit point.

Unless before time she escapes
that gypsy lady will be as dust
and blow with the wind and her discards
into the land of “The End” …
but time, yes, time; what is time
that never forever has stilled the wind?

Helen / 4 August 2012


© Copyright 2012 Helen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-08-04 07:31 AM


She seems to have troubled the wind to an extent that the wind, relentless in its calling, is determined to make of her the soil from whence she came. Enjoyed this little story, Helen.

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Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22
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Alberta, Canada
2 posted 2012-08-04 09:09 AM


A journey that I have made and understand...very well written...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Klassy Lassy
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3 posted 2012-08-04 06:15 PM


I love parables, and this has that feeling, also the gypsy nomamdic wisdom.  You write it well, and I loved reading it, Helen.  I wonder how much refuse will end up at my feet again.  Best to dispose of it right if I don't want to dispose of it a second time. A lesson of depth, dear heart.  Slow learner, here.   
Margherita
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4 posted 2012-08-09 05:29 PM


But for that one moment or two
how glorious it was to be free
and speak the words of love’s honesty
even if unto the deaf.


And isn't that the true peak in life's wanderings and ponderings? Great, profound and beautiful thoughts you develop here, dear Helen. There is always some insight to gain when following your philosophical reflections.

Margherita

JL
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since 2004-04-01
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5 posted 2012-08-10 11:46 PM


As always, Helen, you do make the reader think, and rethink...  I love this story of a mysterious gypsy girl and her endeavor to journey through all that seems to be against her.  Mountain, wind, and time.  I love the struggle.  
Reminded me of a story I heard in a movie, someone said: "We all struggle, gasp for air, and then we die."

Enjoyed the read!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Ericc
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6 posted 2012-08-13 03:54 PM


Wonderful write - great, descriptive language with a beautiful flow.
Honeybunch
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7 posted 2012-08-13 04:04 PM


Oh dear, I have been remiss in not thanking you all for your comments.  I'm obviously not on "flat level ground" - my apologies.  They are all greatly appreciated.  Thank you.

Helen

BluesSerenade
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8 posted 2012-08-13 07:48 PM


I really liked your frist line, and how she broke up camp.  Like a bird in flight, your spirit soars so high.

Your writing gives me much to ponder Helen.

You are a wonderful inspiration dear lady!!

ebonygirl
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9 posted 2012-08-13 10:28 PM


May the gypsy lady prevail against all odds and
take flight with the wind.
Enjoyed your poem,
Ms. E

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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South Africa
10 posted 2012-08-14 09:21 AM


Thank you, Bluesy and Ms. E. It was a camp of dismay so it had to be broken up.  Nothing like venturing beyond one's comfort zone just, of course, until the new becomes yet another comfort zone.  Yeah - that gypsy lady searches but I wonder if she'll ever find.

Helen  

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