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Nigelinoz
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since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

0 posted 2012-07-24 07:16 AM

Tonight as I lay crying
Feeling lost and feeling blue
There came to me a vision
Of loveliness,of you

You took my hand
And held me near
You smiled so sweetly
And dried my tears

You held me close
Close to your heart
And gently promised
We shall not part

You pledged your love
And once again
You promised the end
of this lonely pain

This lonely pain
This feeling of dread
This feeling of emptyness
That space on the bed

You took my arm
If only that were true
For tonight I'm alone
I was dreaming-of you.

Sunshine

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1 posted 2012-07-24 10:31 AM

A lovely write, Nigel. Welcome to Passions!
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"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

Nigelinoz
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since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

2 posted 2012-07-24 10:44 AM

Thank you so much Sunshine,you know it's a funny thing a few years ago I was in a relationship and I tried to write poems for my partner but they were hard to write and were pretty awful,fast forward to a few weeks ago and a lady who I have always wanted but been too shy to tell sends me an email and we soon fall head over heels in love and now I find poems are literally pouring out of me.
I guess true love is really inspiring me,sad thing is she is on the other side of the world in Utah so it's hard being apart from the one who is meant for you.
Thanks for the lovely comments.
Cheers
N'oz

You may as well give cherries to a pig as give advice to a fool-
Irish Proverb

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

3 posted 2012-07-24 11:24 AM

Enjoyed your poem, welcome to pip.
Ms. E

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-07-24 05:58 PM

I look forward to more of your work...this one was well done and told the story of your pain...distant love is hard but not impossible...good luck...welcome to the blue pages...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2012-07-26 11:48 PM

Wonderful...James

Nigelinoz
Member

since 2012-07-24

Posts 71
Victoria,Australia

6 posted 2012-07-27 01:08 AM

Thank you to everyone for the very kind comments,I appreciate all the support I have received and I hope that as time goes on I will become as good as you guys.
Cheers
N'oz

You may as well give cherries to a pig as give advice to a fool-
Irish Proverb

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

7 posted 2012-08-07 01:06 AM

Lovelorn... I feel the emotions in this one. You can be in the same room with someone and not connect, or, as you say, across the world, and dreams begin to take wing.

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