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suthern
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0 posted 07-19-2012 09:19 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Your face filled my heart as I woke to morn -
Before eyes opened or thoughts could be born
There was you, there was want, but a cold bed
Stretched beside me. It was all in my head.

Your hands gave me shivers, when in the shower
I turned to your kiss, anxious to devour
The pleasures I knew you’d offer to me -
But I was alone. The room was empty.

Your arms coaxed me back from the kitchen sink.
With your breath on my neck, I couldn't think
Beyond knowing that all I have to give
Belongs to you. You're the reason I live.

Whether we're together or far apart,
You fuel my fantasies and fill my heart.
You star in my dreams, give song to my soul,
You’re the one who completes me, makes me whole.

Though we're separated by circumstance
Remember - for me, you define romance!
I long for the day our lives will entwine -
Until then, you’re held close, here in my mind.
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1 posted 07-19-2012 09:44 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Oh suthern your have me sobbing. I know this so well, though I have lost hope that he was ever meant for me regardless of the poetry he wrote for me.
JerryPat2
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2 posted 07-19-2012 10:12 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Touching poetry of being separated by happenstance, and the memories and fantasizes that are conjured p is beautifully rendered, Suthern.

~*~ they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
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3 posted 07-19-2012 02:02 PM       View Profile for Startime1955   Email Startime1955   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Startime1955

I know this dream place well..,.I go there each night...real or not it brings my heart peace...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

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4 posted 07-19-2012 03:34 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

lovely but too sad. Keep your spirits up. love ya, jo
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5 posted 07-19-2012 08:23 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice...James
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6 posted 07-20-2012 10:43 AM       View Profile for ebonygirl   Email ebonygirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ebonygirl

Enjoyed the the tenderness in your poem, Suthern.
Smiles, Ms. E
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7 posted 07-23-2012 09:51 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Marilyn: I'm so sorry for your heartache, dear lady... May it soon ease and let your lungs breathe life... and dreams... again. (((hugs)))

Jerry: Thank you so very much! Your kind comments are greatly appreciated!

Startime: It does, doesn't it? *S* And peace is such a welcome companion! Thank you so much!

latearrival: Thank you for finding it lovely in spite of the sadness... for that is the feeling experienced... and what I'd hoped to convey. *S* (((hugs!)))

JamesMichael: Thank you very much!

ebonygirl: Thank you so much, dear lady... I'm glad you enjoyed! *S*

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8 posted 07-23-2012 08:23 PM       View Profile for Scooter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Scooter

Beautiful, romantic poetry.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

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Oh suthern you spoke not just to my heart but to my very soul with that poem.
Wow,just wow.
Beautifully written,hauntingly lovely.
Cheers
N'oz
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Oh, the tricks one's mind plays
on the heart...

well done, suthern!

Michael
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11 posted 07-26-2012 02:35 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

One can only heave a sigh of exasperation after reading this.  Not sure how the first version of this went but it definately cleared the fence in this version.  Enjoyed much, in my own sadistic, brooding manner.  

Michael
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12 posted 08-01-2012 11:05 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Scooter: Thank you so very much! *S*

N'Oz: Anytime one of my writes elicits a wow, I'm a happy poet! LOL Thank you!

Sunshine: At least heart and mind agree on what SHOULD be. LOL Thank you!

Michael: Exasperated? Sorry 'bout that. *S* Such conjuring certainly could be unwelcome... but in this case, I find it comforting. *S*
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13 posted 08-02-2012 04:49 AM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

Ruth, the day one stops dreaming and remembering, is the day one stops living in the true sense of the word.  Your poem is very beautiful and tender.

Owl
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And what about today?
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15 posted 08-03-2012 01:05 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Owl: So very true!! *S* But I'm a dreamer... awake or sleeping! LOL Thank you very much! *S*

Toerag: LOL... just shove a couple of Gulf states out of the way and I'll be there likitysplit! LOL It's SO good to see your name 'round these parts... thankee kindly, sir!!!! *S*
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The mind is so powerful and full of wonder.  Your poem gave me shivers and every word delighted me to no end.

Love the romance, suthern gal!!!
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17 posted 08-03-2012 05:57 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you so much, Bluesy! I love your response! *S*
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I read this the day that you posted it, Ruth.  and I fell in love with it.  I can help shove those states out of the way if you need them gone.  I have access to a bull dozer and know enough to make it doze.  Not so great on the stopping, but I can go like hell!

xoxoo
Ali
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I know I have commented before suthern but every time I read this I am struck by the sheer loveliness of it,it is emotional,lyrical,poignant and beautiful.
Teach me how to write like this for my girlfriend in Utah and I would be a happy man.
Just brilliant writing.
Cheers
N'oz

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20 posted 08-07-2012 06:46 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

"Though we're separated by circumstance
Remember - for me, you define romance!
I long for the day our lives will entwine -
Until then, you’re held close, here in my mind."

This is a heart-breaker!
Love the way you write and express
your emotions.  Really beautiful
in a sad way...

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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Beautiful,sensuous,devotional and touching are all words that describe this poem but all do not come close to conveying how good this poem is and how good you are at writing it.

Thank you for sharing it.

Goldenrose.

music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou

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quote:
You star in my dreams, give song to my soul


Exquisitely rendered longing, dear Ruth!

Margherita
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23 posted 08-10-2012 02:03 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Alison: Well, git yerself on down here, gal... time's a'wastin'!!! LOL Don't worry 'bout the stopping... sooner or later, it will run out of gas! LOL Thank you so much... for both the offer of assistance and the wonderful comment on the poem! *S* Love you, sweet lady! *S*

Nigel: I always consider it a special compliment when a poet returns for another read... thank you!!! As for your lady... just write your heart - for it's your heart that matters.

JL: Thank you so much!!! It's great to see you back on these blue pages! *S*

Goldenrose: You make me blush, kind sir... thank you very much!!

Margherita: Thank you so much, sweet lady!! *S*
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this is written sooooooo well, it almost brings back to remembrance 'those' feelings....that 'want', that 'desire'....but no....*shakes her head* those days are soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo long ago, I must insist I have forgotten them...course...it wouldn't hurt to read this again.....*smile*
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