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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2012-07-15 02:24 PM


The final goodbye creeps sneakily sly
like a snake in the wilderness does
and stalks the edges of innocence
until it is time to strike.

Patient are snakes and final goodbyes
because the strike must be deadly true
to reach the unprotected core
when it is least expected.

Strike and I'm dead; I don’t exist
like an extraordinary mystical vision
seen and then lost in preposterous life
always present like traffic lights.

Now traffic lights can’t assimilate loss
or empathize with the deprived
so those who should proceed onward
stand immobilized on the line.

They don’t hold up traffic, oh, no. no. no,
because people like me and you and them
are plain and simply mystical visions
seen and then, of course, lost!

Helen / 15 July 2012


© Copyright 2012 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Scooter
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1 posted 2012-07-15 02:48 PM


I agree with everything you have said here, Honeybunch.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

ebonygirl
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2 posted 2012-07-15 05:18 PM


Good byes are never easy... sometimes they are for the best,  other times you just don't know.
Well done HB.
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2012-07-15 05:41 PM


Splitting up can cause dreadful thoughts and repercussions. Sometimes I wonder why the whole "love" thing is set up the way it is. Love has caused more grief and even deaths than most people realize.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22
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4 posted 2012-07-15 07:20 PM


My heart goes out to you...I have shared such feelings...still hope lives eternal...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Marilyn
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5 posted 2012-07-16 10:32 AM


This hit me hard where I live right now. Thanks for sharing.
Honeybunch
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6 posted 2012-07-16 03:40 PM


Thank you all so much for reading and for commenting.  I guess goodbye is goodbye regardless of whether it is said or not.  
jwesley
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7 posted 2012-07-16 04:56 PM


Goodbyes are things that though not replaceable are shrinkable and surmountable with "hello's", my friend..."we" just have to make the decision that it's time to do so (and I'm speaking from the standpoint of the 'receiver' not the 'giver').

j.

Honeybunch
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8 posted 2012-07-17 02:25 AM


Too true "J".  As I get older I find it harder to make decisions of any kind but eventually it's a case of "what the hell, go for it" and I've seldom regretted those decisions.
Thanks for the read.

Helen

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9 posted 2012-07-17 01:56 PM


Patient are snakes and final goodbyes
because the strike must be deadly true
to reach the unprotected core
when it is least expected.

How very true! And both can poison our existence... Excellent write!

ethome
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10 posted 2012-07-17 01:59 PM


Helen
The emotions are so well expressed in this piece.
Never ready for that trauma.
This has got some bitter strength in it and that makes this writing potent although it is sad.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

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