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Scooter
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0 posted 2012-07-13 11:41 AM


I hate being alone, hurts to the bone,
I've nothing to show, I guess I'll eat crow.
I'm no longer me, I have been set free,
But free I don't want, as you stand and flaunt.

I've secrets to tell, or maybe I'll sell,
This feels like a wake, I long for a break.
The turmoil inside has robbed my pride,
I am the man without a good game plan.

Are you happy now? You broke every vow.
I am a memory, without love's key.
I stare into space, picture you in lace,
You have dealt me out, that's what its about.

We were happy once, now I'm the dunce,
My head is cast down, my face has a frown.
You used to confide, and oh, how I tried,
You think I forgot I was a subplot.

Think I wish you cheer? Hope your teeth rot, dear.
There are times at night I've you in my sight.
I brought a new scope, even nighttime hope,
I don't wish you well, I cast evil spells.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

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Marilyn
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1 posted 2012-07-13 12:32 PM


I can so relate to this poem!
Scooter
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2 posted 2012-07-13 12:38 PM


Thank you, Marilyn, I guess a lot of people can.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

Startime1955
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3 posted 2012-07-13 02:08 PM


I can relate well to this pain...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Scooter
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4 posted 2012-07-13 02:55 PM


Much appreciated, Startime.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

Namyh
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5 posted 2012-07-13 07:56 PM


Scooter - There's nothing like good old vitriolic bile made from anger to inspire the malice in a betrayed poet. I liked this write. Namyh  
Scooter
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6 posted 2012-07-14 09:50 AM


I'm sorry, Namyh, that I missed your comment yesterday. I am happy you liked the rage inside, for it is surely there.--Scooter

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2012-07-14 10:30 AM


the hurt and rage are released in your words...hope it helps

Like others, I have felt the same before


M

ebonygirl
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8 posted 2012-07-14 12:21 PM


Just a few choice words to convey a serious
message... hope things will get better.
ms. e

Scooter
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9 posted 2012-07-14 12:53 PM


I appreciate your comments, M, and believe it or not, but it has helped.

Thanks, Ms E, as I was saying to M things are better. She is still gone, but maybe it is for the best. At least I have gotten that far in my thinking.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2012-07-14 07:31 PM


Fine writing...its hard to let go but if we can imagine having to stay in a relationship we are unhappy with we can understand the need to be set free.  And then its still hard and takes time, understanding and choices...James
Scooter
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11 posted 2012-07-14 07:44 PM


Yeah, I hear what you're saying,James, and you are right. Thank you.

"The way to crush the bourgeoisie is to grind them between the millstones of taxation and inflation."-Vladimir Lenin

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