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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-06-27 03:09 PM

look at it this way
your mind is at work
caprice is in session
holding consistency
yours is a growing
kindred romanticism
as you search filigree
embellished sky high
awaiting the abstract
spiraling moonbeams
to swathe your body
with the love of a far
away one who only
appears in secret trysts
tempting fate for her
for she is your adytum
her face sacred, her
body a shrine of bliss
these wonderful trysts
are sweet to the bone
still, leaving us pseudo
fulfilled, wanting more
not now, maybe never
these few minutes of
love sharing is precious
she takes all the chances
in the fall of the sun

Â©Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2012-06-27 03:30 PM

I learned a new word today...
and I found a new poem to treasure.

Libraried...
with a soft light.

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-06-27 04:04 PM

Thank you, Karilea, it is always fascinating to learn new words, you and your soft light . . . Gotta love it, and I do.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2012-06-27 04:21 PM

WOW!!! Stunning...the picture starts the vision and then your words give it life...Your lady love will love this beauty...*BIG HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-06-27 04:35 PM

I hope she will like it, Karen, and thank YOU for your wonderful thoughts about it.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

5 posted 2012-06-27 05:44 PM

Beautiful, Jerry, both picture and words!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-06-27 05:55 PM

Thank you, Helen, thank you very much.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2012-06-27 07:48 PM

Great writing Jerry and like Helen expressed, the picture makes it all come together.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2012-06-27 07:50 PM

I appreciate the time you took to read my poem and comment, Eric. Thank you.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

9 posted 2012-06-27 08:52 PM

I've commented one time about a poem that felt bittersweet, and here I read yours and feel the same feeling. Pseudo fulfilled... how apropos. This certainly tugs at the heart strings.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2012-06-27 09:03 PM

The thing is, Nicole, we live in a instant gratifying world these days, and love had filtered into the instant gratifying world. Not too many love affairs, or even marriages make it these day. Don't know if that is all bad. Living with a person you can't stand the site of just for the kid, who will call you everything but a good parent in their teenage years has it merits too.

Thank you for stopping by, I appreciate it.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2012-06-28 04:20 PM

What a beautiful presentation! Poem and picture complement each other so well... This is just lovely!

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

12 posted 2012-06-28 04:30 PM

quote:
these few minutes of
love sharing is precious
she takes all the chances
in the fall of the sun

This is wonderful, how true that even a few minutes can give us a true "high" that nurtures us for hours, days ...

Much enjoyed!

Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

13 posted 2012-06-28 04:34 PM

Thank you very much, suthern, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, it is appreciated.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

14 posted 2012-06-28 04:36 PM

Margherita, it is those true "highs" that we live for and receive far too few of during our lives. Thank you for being here.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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