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a taste of salt upon my dream
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a taste of salt upon my dream |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Oh-my-lover-lied-to-me-- I'm stunned by my stupidity. And then? I married him decreed thinking this protected me from the pain of her, her plans survialist with legal maps she said I ought to take a nap I trusted her: I trusted him. I thought the best of both of them. She called me stupid to my face and I feel guilty in disgrace for all that hatred I misplaced? I wish he'd died in pain's complaint about the bargaining erased between the two of them. * * * I rubbed my head and fell asleep. I fell into a dream of weep. Houses, houses, everywhere, I had to sign my name and there were houses more than family: "Whose is this I sign to keep?" I did not understand the fourth-- the address, I asked "Whose the source?" They looked at me reluctantly and told me that it was my son's. WAS??? Oh-tell-me where is he? Where is my daughter? "They're deceased." My husband? Sister? Nephew? Niece? "I'm sorry, but they're all deceased." "I had another brother, he?" "Died in the war with bravery medals here for testament..." Sign here. And here. And here, again. What happened to my family? "They were victims of The war." I had a daughter--tell me, please? "Sign the papers, you will see and live your life more comfortably-- a stipend granted unto you, as burials are paid." And so I did. I paid for graves. I signed away the homes we'd saved, wishing I'd died anyway when the sun had shine to say: "Check your ink. It's blood." |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I like the flow of this - the back and forth. Enjoyed. -Trina |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I had this terrible dream....couldn't shake it off so I wrote it outta me.  Thanks for indulging me.  |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
WOW...this is more of a nightmare...my heart broke for you as I read it...great writing...*HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
WOW! That was intense. jo |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
This dream... is, but a dream to be, dreamt again but, with a better end. ms. e |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wow - A terrible dream to be sure but so well written. Got the shivers now. Hope it's out of you now. Helen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh serenity... you too? check your email...  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This terrible dream you dreamt is not so far from reality for too many who actually have lost almost everybody and everything, because of war or other dramatic events. Maybe your consciousness has mingled with theirs and you wrote somehow on their behalf, to find peace. You write in a way that takes the breath away, dear Karen. Margherita |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I really need to stop writing. *shudder* I give myself the creeps. Thank you all for your amazing enduring patience with me. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've had some doozies of nightmares... but the ones where I'm alive without those I love are the worst... they leave an ache that the alarm clock doesn't ease. This gripped me with every word... (((HUGS))) |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Oh how I've missed you. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
No, you shouldn't stop writing but you creep me out sometimes, too. Nice to see you're still here, K. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
WOW, what a nightmare! Here's wishing you sweet dreams instead. Kat >^..^< |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Serenity, so glad to find this tonight. Expressed unrest...you do have a way of bringing so many emotions to surface with your gift. TY |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I see you posted this almost a year ago but I wasnt here a year ago...Enjoyed your words even though very sad...Nicely done. ~Victoria I was adored once too. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
This gave me goosebumps. I always enjoyed reading your poems, and it's so nice to read your poems again. |
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Sue_s Junior Member
since 2013-03-26
Posts 45 |
Wow. I know OF dreams. I didn't want this to end. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
you never cease to amaze me miss K... even in bad dreams!! I need to come here more often... you make words on paper come to life You can never win or lose |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Was glad to see this one brought back up. I remember reading it a few times over the first time around... thought it was great. Sorry I never got around to replying to it then. Michael |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Wow. You left me needing a cup of tea. A |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Absolutely fine writing...James |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I would just be happy is was a dream. Life can get tooreal sometimes. Very tramatic though. Powerful... written in your special style. Ida |
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