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Zall
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0 posted 2012-05-27 07:40 AM


Looked in the mirror today
A human being, a living puzzle
Black hair flecked with grey
A map of lines and stubble

How we resemble
Porcelain smashed from shelves
And thus we assemble
The pieces of ourselves

The fragments, the glue, the Irony
Cradle to grave, through place and role
The fashioning. Of a parody
In attempt to remake, what never was whole


© Copyright 2012 Aaron Zall - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-05-27 08:12 AM


THIS is the best poem, in my opinion, I have ever read from you, Yann. It is deep and concentrated in the making of the whole. And yes, it ties in with my poem as you said it did.

~*~ Love is composed of a single soul inhabiting two bodies.--Aristotle ~*~

Zall
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2 posted 2012-05-27 08:41 AM


Thanks :-)
Marchmadness
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3 posted 2012-05-27 09:28 AM


Fine writing, Zall.
                 Ida

Startime1955
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4 posted 2012-05-27 10:44 AM


Oh wow this is wonderful writing...well said...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Zall
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5 posted 2012-05-27 11:01 AM


Thanks so much.. :-)
ebonygirl
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6 posted 2012-05-27 01:03 PM


Oh, I like this poem, Zal.
My fragments come in pieces. Reminds me,
I wrote one called Pieces.
Enjoyed, Ms. E

ethome
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7 posted 2012-05-27 02:04 PM


Very good Zall, if it ever was really whole in the first place.
However, I get what you're layin down here and I got one of those mirrors.

And that's Zall I got to say.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Zall
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8 posted 2012-05-28 04:42 AM


:-D.. thanks
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9 posted 2012-06-11 08:22 AM


I really like this... especially the last line! *S*
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