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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2012-05-19 05:41 AM




she influences me
like the Harvest Moon
inspires lovers
like . . .
tides ebb and flow
calling to Neptune
like . . .
the petals
of a rose opening
giving to the world what it can
she . . .
shapes my days
like the sunrise each morning
I breathe in her earthiness
nectar of Goddess
my world
has become . . . she

©May 1, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

© Copyright 2012 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2012-05-19 05:53 AM


Wow! Concise but says so much between the lines and really one of your best romantics yet.

"like . . .
the petals
of a rose opening
giving to the world what it can"

Yeah, that's real poetic romance at work.

Eric


true love never looks after it's own interests

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2012-05-19 05:55 AM


Nice comments, especially coming from you, Eric. They are much appreciated.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2012-05-19 09:54 AM


Now that's some lovely worship.
JerryPat2
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4 posted 2012-05-19 10:24 AM


Good morning, Karen, and thank you so much for stopping by with your kind words.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ebonygirl
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5 posted 2012-05-19 03:28 PM


Oh, JP! This is sooo beautiful.
It touched my heart...just beautiful.
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2012-05-19 03:33 PM


Ms. E, and you reached out and touched me with that comment. Thank you, thank you very much.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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7 posted 2012-05-19 05:22 PM


Love looks sooo good on you my friend! This is fantastic!

Lori

Startime1955
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8 posted 2012-05-19 05:46 PM


Love wrapped in beautiful words...This vision is stunning...great writing...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

JerryPat2
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9 posted 2012-05-19 05:47 PM


Thanks, Lori, I appreciate it.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JerryPat2
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10 posted 2012-05-19 05:48 PM


Hi Karen. You're swelling my head. Don't stop. Haha Thank you so much.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JL
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11 posted 2012-05-20 08:50 PM


Well brother, this is some poem!
Excellent!!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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12 posted 2012-05-20 08:58 PM


Thank you, my friend, I appreciate the heck of of your words.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Street Poet
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13 posted 2012-05-20 11:30 PM


This poem is very powerful. The imagery is so intense. Great Job.
JerryPat2
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14 posted 2012-05-21 05:23 AM


Thank you very much, Street Poet.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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