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Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2012-05-14 11:32 AM

Green, Green Grass

Softness beneath my feet,
And sweet smells in the wind-
All so unnatural

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-05-14 11:37 AM

Haha! Threw us a curve ball,didn't ya, Juju? Expecting pleasant words to describe the pleasant scene, but I quite understand your logic in calling it unnatural. Good choice of words.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

2 posted 2012-05-14 01:35 PM

I have a dark sense of humor... It may not be healthy.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2012-05-14 01:44 PM

It's healthy, just in a weird way. I'm pretty much there with you.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2012-05-14 02:25 PM

I'm so sorry to hear that while walking through that green grass you walked into a cowpie....
Probably in your bare feet too, ah well, the world loves the sweet smells of a farm girl.....

Don't mind me I'm a self declared nutcase, I disarm a lot of people that way.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

5 posted 2012-05-14 03:38 PM

LOL!!! I'm still laughing at what Eric said...sometimes our soul needs a little dark to balance us...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2012-05-14 09:36 PM

And genuinely funny, too!

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

7 posted 2012-05-15 02:14 PM

It has been far too long since I have read your words... it will not be this long again.
I truly enjoyed this

Life's journey is not to arrive at the grave safely in a well preserved body, but rather to skid in sideways, totally worn out, shouting, "WHAT A RIDE

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2012-05-16 01:25 AM

Nice...James

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2012-05-16 11:22 AM

it seems the world is so unatural , sometimes we take consciouness ot it and it can be amazing, such powerful is your poem,

yann

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

10 posted 2012-05-16 01:15 PM

Lol..

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2012-05-17 08:43 AM

wore this one on my leather when I stopped to place a cigar on the grave of a widow. enjoyed it jbomb

Ron63
Junior Member

since 2012-03-18

Posts 49
Suffolk, Eng, UK

12 posted 2012-05-18 03:49 AM

If this isn't an hiaku, it seems to read like one that creates the potential for many interpretations. I read this poem yesterday and loved its brevity but wasn't sure how to comment, except to say 'I liked it very much'. I had to return again today for another read and still feel puzzled about the last line, which is why I like it, it causes the mind to think deeply about what you have written. If this forum had a points system your poem would be close 10 points. Nice one.

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