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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2012-05-14 09:55 AM


the reverend black was a brown dog
but blind molly said he was still pretty
like what she saw with her eyes closed
when she looked for god at her evenings

he didn't bark at strangers at the gate much
no one came to see molly there on purpose
cause she always made them feel too visible
and their hurt places kept them more distant

molly gave him pieces of love tree fruit
bit them off herself and fed him by hand
said he kissed her fingers for each bite
gave her empty place a full smile serving

when he made wag tail music on the pickets


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daark

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ethome
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1 posted 2012-05-14 02:30 PM


Now this is BEAUTIFUL.
Love how concise you are but get so much across. Touching scenes.

When I read the title I really did expect a Johnny Cash song, see how easy it is to fool me!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Startime1955
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since 2012-04-22
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Alberta, Canada
2 posted 2012-05-14 03:40 PM


Very touching and Perfectly written...I love the flow and song of this poem...*HUGS*

*may our dreams ever be magical*

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2012-05-14 08:31 PM


Et..thanks bromigo

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Starfriend..thank you for the review.

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4 posted 2012-06-08 04:05 PM


no one came to see molly there on purpose
cause she always made them feel too visible

Sometimes those with 20/20 vision are the most blind of all. I'm glad she had the brown rev black. *S*

Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2012-06-10 06:11 PM


Your gift of words still amazes me D...each and every time.  Much enjoyed seeing through your minds eye view today m'friend.
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