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Open Poetry #48

white noise

ponderthepoetorrsx
Member

since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

0 posted 2012-05-01 10:48 AM

craclke crackle
see my lips move
thats what he sees
crackle crackle
can he hear you?
tears spill down your cheeks
he doesnt care

at church don't steal
at home don't steal
at school don't steal

then over again except
replcae the end word
don't you know?

crackle crackle
warn him
scold him
it wont change anything

he';; still do drugs
still steal
and all the things you warn him against.

crackle crackle crackle

you should hug him
kiss his forhead
find a different way through

crackle crackle crackle
because otherwise
its all white noise to him

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2012-05-01 11:06 AM

very profound thinking here...All too true.
Well done!

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-05-01 11:32 AM

Excellent! Par Excellence!

I loved this . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2012-05-01 12:51 PM

Vivid poetic reasoning.
Excellent!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-05-01 01:13 PM

How profound and how very true...great writing telling life's truths...

luminosity
Senior Member

since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

5 posted 2012-05-02 02:18 PM

profound.....speaks loud and clear...no white noise within these lines!

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