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Piano Dreams.... |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Watching mother play her piano as her long delicate fingers press the keys every so carefully. She seems to become transported to another time & place, with a hint of sadness like she is longing to go back to a time when memories were sweeter. Perhaps a first love never fulfilled, maybe that day in the summer of her youth when she would lie on the lap of her suitor as he recited poetry, when love was all there was in those carefree days. Stumbling in the grass the giggles abound, playfully falling as there lips met so tenderly. As they look into the sky lying there hand in hand perhaps dreaming of there future so young and innocent .... so in love..... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Beautifully constructed, dreamgal. The reminders of a past time gently filling your mother with pleasant feeling. You said it was okay to critique. I only have this . . . press the keys every so carefully. (should be ever, not every.) playfully falling as there lips met so tenderly. (their, not there.) hand perhaps dreaming of there future (again, their instead of there.) ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
I love this poem...it weaves such a vision of innocent love in days gone by...the world seems too fast today for the simple pleasures of love giving one the fulfillment one needs...Thank you for the read |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Thank you Jerry for pointing those misspelled words right (did i spell misspelled right?) HA I'm serious no sarcasm toward you really. I do tend to type to fast i should learn to slow down. I get a thought in my head and i go off and just start typing i would like to learn to take my time working on that and my spelling errors Ha! Thank you friend! |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Thank you Startime im glad you enjoyed it!  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Nothing like a piano to get carried away into dreams of yesterday ... Beautiful! You will read it to her and she will be pleased no doubt, maybe even blushing just a tiny little bit, for you read her so well. Margherita |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi dreamgal. This is a beautiful picture of reminiscing through imagining another's thoughts. I really love the idea of it, should I say the old fashioned idea of it as the world seems to have dumped such slowly developing romances that allowed lovers to get to know one another better. Very nice indeed! Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Gorgeous nostalgia! Tenderly rendered. Amaryllis |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Very pretty...a gentle memory. ms. e |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Thank you all, glad you enjoyed this as much as I did. Appreciate you stopping by! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is a pleasure to read...an extreem pleasure...James |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I love the beautiful serene image you have painted.Lovely thoughts indeed. ~Victoria I was adored once too. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
And I just plain agree with everything above, though I think a little different formatting would add to its beauty. jimmy [This message has been edited by jwesley (03-15-2013 12:01 AM).] |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Reflective and playful. A real joy to read. |
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