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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2012-04-22 06:37 AM



I walked the rails

barefoot

wide-legged

straddling

my legs denied

the slats

of one train

on her way.


I walked the rails

with no shoes on
and never looked ahead.

I walked the levee

dreaming of

things that kids do--

this-n-that

of what it might be like

alone

of what it might be like

to catch

a freight train
just like Woody did

I thought of things like that

and dreamed
of being Bobby Dylan

cracked

with a Harmony
and strap

singing Joan's injustices
wishing that I could be mad
and graceful all at once...
with that
angelic beckoning...

I wanted to be all of them;
my-guitar-strapped-cross-my-back
staring at the slow train, come

before my toes would jump the rails
excited that I felt the train
rumbling through my spine's refrain
singing through my feet, insane

oh-damn-I-may-have-lost-some-stringx

off my guitar in tumbling
laughing down the thrill.

I thought:

"It must have been something like that..."
as I counted my tres strings
faking them in tune

and me

walking with my Harmony
rightback up the levee green

to sing

something

to fake a tune

sans a string or two.

Or three...

straddling the rails.


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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-04-22 06:52 AM


I caught that train for you, Karen. Quite a few of them in fact. Always wound back up where I started from with no outward progress. But then, I wasn't singing Guthrie, Dylan and Baez, my song was "Ramblin' Man," by Hank.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2012-04-22 06:59 AM


don't ya miss the trains?

I was just a kid, and yeah, I had romantic ideas. I wish I still felt that free, though, I truly do.



Thanks for popping in, and smile..I KNOW you're not gonna tell me that you never sang, "This Train (is bound for Glory"...

smile

I know you have.

Margherita
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3 posted 2012-04-22 07:04 AM


quote:
wishing that I could be mad
and graceful all at once...
with that
angelic beckoning...


I followed in your footsteps while reading and I felt your emotions. This is so vivid and impressive. Great performance.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2012-04-22 07:09 AM


Yes, Karen,I most certainly did sing that song, but there was a difference between you and I, and it has to do with the time period. And circumstances. I just wanted to leave Taylor, Arkansas and never, ever come back. I did leave, but I always came back and that has been my shame. It has been many, many year though since I have see the city limits of Taylor.

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serenity blaze
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5 posted 2012-04-22 07:17 AM


A. you should write about that.

B. "This Train" is due for a comeback.




Mergherita? I thank you ao muxh. And it looks like the sun is coming up again...off to the crypt, I creep *hugs*

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2012-04-22 07:46 AM


Oh,I did write about it,Karen. The name of the book is, "Misdemeanors and Felonies: A Memoir," and it is available at the bottom of the page here . . . http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/fauxcajun?searchTerms=&pageOffset=5

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Startime1955
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7 posted 2012-04-22 04:36 PM


Yes ... memories flow back and make me appreciate the trains as they move through this town...
latearrival
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8 posted 2012-04-22 09:40 PM


I love this.I could see you so innocent stepping on those rails,Singing along like woody Guthrie. I have never wished for that life although I sometimes envied the hoboes. I just wanted to travel by thumb like my brothers did but I was never old enough or free enough in spirit to do it.One day my brother who is three years younger insisted we hitchhike home from the beach. I said "no!",in my unathorative 13 year old voice. I was responsible for him.But he put out his thumb and climbed into the back seat of a car that stopped and I had to get in with him. I was not a happy little girl that day.  jo
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9 posted 2012-04-23 12:50 PM


This took me back to a time when I was young and foolish and did hop the odd train or two with my cousin.  I miss those times, they were the best.

Great memories K.  Thanks for reminding me of a much simpler time, when no worry or cares.


Carpe' Diem

Amaryllis
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10 posted 2012-04-23 12:52 PM


Tender, nostalgic write...I love this, very much enjoyed!

Amaryllis

ice
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11 posted 2012-04-23 08:25 AM


Oh it is... a thrill in the words of this poem.

Slidin' on time-blood that made the tracks slick;
Woody long gone, but still she sings--
His, are her songs now--she plays
In free verse, A, and E minor chords--painted signs
That prove the train he rode had passed that way.

By time, she binds with glory,
Word drivers rolling into the night;
She hitches a westward ride
With Bobbie--Harmony and strap
Fueling the engine of your rhyme.

Wind carries memories, dreams
And broken plans..The fog is plain;
Its Joanies voice, in air never cleared
Of sounds of whips that crack, and lash
The backs of those that pray for justice.

Ignoring the foul songs the world still sings,
Yet she continues

"to sing
something
to fake a tune
sans a string or two.
Or three...
straddling the rails"

Even with a string or two missing, and maybe
a couple out of tune..

I really enjoyed this poem...loved it!

serenity blaze
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12 posted 2012-04-23 12:44 PM


Just for the record, I never hopped ON a train, although my dream vacation (which remains a broken promise from my husband) is to ride The City of New Orleans from here to Chicago to attend The Chicago Blues Fest.

I just spent a lot of time alone, walking a nearby freight track, and thought a lot about the history of the political/folk musicians who did seem to pack of a lot living and life into their music, influencing politics and changing history utilizing nothing but guitars, harmonicas, their passions, and their brains.

Hmmm. *chuckle*

Maybe I should reconsider returning to college and pick up an old guitar?

Love you guys and gals! Thanks for reading. But? NOT GONNA HOP A TRAIN. I'v fallen down enough.

Thanks for reading. <--I can't actually "bounce" either.

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2012-04-28 07:27 PM


Nice to read...they are going to build a rail in Hawaii, perhaps I will be riding the rails in the future...James
ethome
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14 posted 2012-04-28 08:02 PM


My God Celeste you're drifting back in this one.

All the way through Woody Guthrie, Bob Dylan and Joan Baez.
All that with the old Harmony guitar straped to your back.
I had one, blond finish and acoustic arch top hollow body and I could hardly push the strings down but I learned.

Great stuff my dear, I loved walking those rails too....Nice memories to say the least.

Glad you jumped off the rails so you could write this American culture reflection.

You da gal!

Way down on the levy in old Alabamy
There's Daddy and Mammy
There's Ephraim and Sammy
On a moonlight night you can find them all
While they are waiting,
The banjos are syncopating
What's that they're saying?
What's that they're saying?
While they keep playing
A - humming and swaying
It's the good ship Robert E. Lee
that's come to carry the cotton away!
Watch them shuffling along,
See them shuffling along!
Go take your best gal, real pal
Go down to the levy, I said to the levy,
and join that shuffling throng
Hear that music and song!
It's simply great, mate, waiting on the levy
Waiting for the Robert E. Lee!
The whistles are blowing, the smokestacks are showing
the ropes they are throwing, excuse me I'm going
to the place where all is harmonious
even the preacher, he is the dancing teacher!
Have you been down there?
Were you around there?
If you ever go there you'll always be found there,
why, dog-gone, here comes my baby
on the good old Robert E. Lee!
Watch them shuffling along,
See them shuffling along
Go take your best gal, real pal
Go down to the levy, I said to the levy,
And join that shuffling throng
Hear that music and song!
It's simply great, mate, waiting on the levy
Waiting for the Robert E. Lee!

Some old old American folk song culture, sorry I got carried away.....smile..

Oh, by the way, I enjoyed this....

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Juju
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15 posted 2012-04-28 08:42 PM


I find my self relating to this poem.  Lovely write.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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