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Amaryllis
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0 posted 2012-04-22 01:21 AM




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Come, build your ragged cairn
if you must-

lift your apologies like stones,
create your fragile tower-
rattle against the tired
edges of this heart.

Time sweeps strong.

Your pebble temples, new and old
shiver bit by bit, shaking
slow apart with
every seismic song.


It won't be long.


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[This message has been edited by Amaryllis (04-22-2012 05:11 AM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2012-04-22 06:49 AM


Dear Amaryllis, I hoped you would be back and here you are, dear Poetess.

quote:
lift your apologies like stones,
create your fragile tower-
rattle against the tired
edges of this heart.


Amazing and impressive imagery! I looked for the term "cairn" and found a definition that fits: "a simple pile of rocks, mostly useless  ...".

Excellent poem.

Love,
Margherita

Amaryllis
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2 posted 2012-04-22 11:29 AM


Thank you very much, Margherita!  I appreciate your support  

A

ebonygirl
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3 posted 2012-04-22 11:48 PM


"It won't be long"
When that is said, it is pretty much over.
Cool poem,
Ms. E

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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4 posted 2012-04-22 11:58 PM


lift your apologies like stones,
create your fragile tower-
rattle against the tired
edges of this heart.


Caustic perception very well penned.
Futility in emotional stalemate.

Really like this a lot.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Amaryllis
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5 posted 2012-04-23 12:46 PM


Thank you very much, ebonygirl and eric...very much appreciate your looking in  

Amaryllis

Huan Yi
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6 posted 2012-04-23 07:48 PM


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Good


John


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Amaryllis
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7 posted 2012-04-23 10:59 PM


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Thank you very much, John, I am so pleased you liked it...means a lot coming from a talent such as yourself. I enjoy your works.

Amaryllis

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JamesMichael
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8 posted 2012-04-24 12:59 PM


Enjoyed...James
Startime1955
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9 posted 2012-04-24 11:27 AM


You write with such power...amazing
Amaryllis
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10 posted 2012-04-24 02:02 PM


Thank you, James, and startime  

A

bel1e
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11 posted 2012-04-25 08:05 PM


niiice~*~enjoyed the tremors~*~*

              

Amaryllis
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12 posted 2012-04-25 09:35 PM


Thank you, be1le  


A

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