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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 2012-04-11 09:39 AM




Golden light fills the fields and trees
Bird songs fill the air
Trills and tweets
whistles and chirps
flying to and fro
Redwing black birds
sing on the wing
A pheasant crows
Meadowlarks hidden heard
The choir grows
with voices clear
singing the sun down

LGRĀ©4/11/12



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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-04-11 09:51 AM


My head is reeling with all the singing, but it is a good reeling. Nice poetry, Lori.

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Ron63
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2 posted 2012-04-11 12:50 PM


I found this poem a joyful one to read but when I read it silently it didn't flow for me. However, when I read it aloud and placed imaginary commas and full stops where my mind wanted them to be, the poem flowed beautifully. It's a teriffic poem.

I love nature poetry and write quite a lot of them myself, mostly free verse and without punctuations. I use stressed words to end a line and line breaks instead of commas and spaces between lines for full stops.

Margherita
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3 posted 2012-04-13 09:35 AM


You have captured all the charm of twilight time, a delightful concert.

Margherita

ebonygirl
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4 posted 2012-04-13 10:12 AM


Your poem is like a song... a bird song.
Enjoyed Lori, ms. e

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