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JerryPat2
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South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-04-09 12:56 PM

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alone in the forest of my creation
time speeds by
like a downhill racer
I watch the saplings grow
each into worlds of their own
as did I
once upon a time
I’m cold
there is no fire
somehow this seems much too much
like a deathwatch
if Heaven is my
destination I wonder if I’ll like it
Heaven
will there be too much pomposity
and ceremonial procedure
could be you know
and Hell
certainly won’t care much for it
fire and brimstone
I’ve seen fire
never brimstone
except in a hurricane
ah
listen to me
talking like a ninny
still, the saplings keep growing
stretching outward
toward their own place in the forest
some seem to want
to leave the forest
to explore
a new frontier
I did that a long, long time ago
I stretched toward
the stars and moons
of sidewalk cafes
blue moon saloons
and ever-ready honeys
swaggered down mean streets undaunted
somehow survived
I fled
far and away from my hometown
and hate kept me running
I’m not running anymore
but I still live with the hate
I’m not so far from my hometown these days
except in my heart

©Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (04-10-2012 05:55 AM).]

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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1 posted 2012-04-09 04:31 PM

Like the forest of your creation Heaven could just be the way you imagine it, so imagine it to your liking!

You did a very good job with this one, Jerry!

... love the image of the saplings that keep growing gloriously.

Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-04-09 04:32 PM

I appreciate your kind comments, Margherita .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Sunshine

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3 posted 2012-04-09 09:35 PM

ah
listen to me
talking like a ninny
still, the saplings keep growing
stretching outward
toward their own place in the forest

~*~

Ah, considering my current "read"
I can see the bent of your mind
and how it reaches, ever reaches
in finding its own place.

Well done, m'friend.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-04-09 09:41 PM

That,then, is the wonderful thing about poetry, no matter how we slice it, it is about the poet . . . Thank you Karlie . . .

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2012-04-10 05:35 AM

Your stylus is in the right groove in this one, Jerry.

This is beautiful soul music.

And the picture amplifies the intensity of the song.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-04-10 05:41 AM

Thanks Ice. Every so often I seem to have the need to vent one more time about something I have never been able to, and doubt that I ever will, forgive. Whatever good that happened to me during my formative years are grossly overshadowed by the crime wrought upon my heart. To this very day this crime rips me anew.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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7 posted 2012-04-10 06:28 AM

your haunted past you create beautiful poetry with...it is a gift.

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

8 posted 2012-04-10 07:04 AM

Yeah, a double-edged sword kinda gift maybe, Lori. Thank you for saying so.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

9 posted 2012-04-10 08:58 AM

Jerry, I'm impressed - wonderful piece, I'd have to call it my favorite of all I've read of you...

j.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

10 posted 2012-04-10 09:08 AM

Thank you, J, for your wonderful comments about "Thoughts in the Forest," they are much appreciated.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

11 posted 2012-04-10 03:56 PM

I really like this poem, JP.
It is smooth, like your voice, I imagine.
The story, although sad, is alive in the flow of life.
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2012-04-10 04:13 PM

Ah, Ms. E, you do know how to strum a guy's feeling, do you not? Thank you so much for your precious comments.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2012-04-18 09:56 PM

Fine writing...James

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana

14 posted 2012-04-19 05:36 AM

Thanks, James...Jerry

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

15 posted 2012-04-19 08:01 PM

..I, too, very much enjoyed..>>spiros

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JerryPat2
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Posts 16975
South Louisiana

16 posted 2012-04-19 08:18 PM

Thank you, Spiros . . .

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