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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2012-04-06 06:16 AM


I have walked along the tops of these trees before
when my feet were just eyes with bones and boots
looking down from another vanilla flavored dawn
for something shiny and not so much wet this time

the sky was always a friendly mantel or man tell
how it kept me from being invisible from below
so the demons looking upward for a god or rain
would have a name to use in vain, while attempting?

I always new my place was the distance of glances
from fragile when I was in her eyes between closing
and time to open again for that kind of business
where she sells me short by the foot or in inches

and pounds out my likeness below cellophane palms

_____________

daark


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MERCURY
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1 posted 2012-04-06 06:17 AM


Nice poem - your words illuminate
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2012-04-06 06:28 AM


thanks Merc
Margherita
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3 posted 2012-04-06 09:49 AM


There is a bitter aftertaste to this, dear D., yet I wonder if 51 is enough ... no doubt distant glances might grant for safety!

Excellent write.

Margherita

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2012-04-06 09:57 AM


Ms Mar...9.5 weeks in an hour with time left to sand the notches of the beating stick..no worries, no bad days...the rubicon was only down to half a tank full.  thanks lady
Margherita
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5 posted 2012-04-06 10:01 AM


you are too cute!

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2012-04-06 10:10 AM


Ms Mar..actually has to do with the comittment of a jeep vs the everyday mundane comfort of a passenger car.  The Rubicon jumps out and over and just does it because it wants to...the passenger car just goes into reverse when it's wheels begin to spin.  Sorry it was not more dramatic..lol


Margherita
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7 posted 2012-04-06 10:16 AM


... yes yes, like flying in a bi-plane and enjoying the adventure, rather than be bored with the safety of a Jumbo jet.

Nicole
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8 posted 2012-04-06 10:54 AM


Disappointing, I'm sure...but people can only be who they are.  I'm sure there's a Jeep out there somewhere. The grocery getter wishes you all happiness in the world.
Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2012-04-06 11:49 AM


ms Nichole.. they say a woman in walking shoes knows less of pigeons than the statue that stands safely under the eave..but whatever..thanks ms


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10 posted 2012-04-09 04:12 PM


I have walked along the tops of these trees before
when my feet were just eyes with bones and boots

These two lines are so magnificent I feared the rest of the poem would be a letdown... then I remembered whose work I was reading. LOL Loved it... all! *S*

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2012-04-10 06:27 AM


Suthern lady..thank you so much for the eyes lady friend.
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