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Four Triolets from 2003 - for you
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Four Triolets from 2003 - for you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Mists It took a moment to see through the mist, Forcing me then to open ev’ry door ~ As a shadow left on me one lone kiss; It took a moment to see through the mist. T’was then I knew, that poetry exists, As one would find when tramping high, cold moors. It took a moment to see through the mist, Forcing me then to open ev’ry door. ~*~ Doors Each door then opened upon a new view Even rooms with windows that lead to stars One, then another, vast vistas so true Each door then opened upon a new view ~ And I, a writer, stand in awe, subdued, Watching captains and kings, poets from afar Each door then opened upon a new view, Even rooms with windows that lead to stars. ~*~ Stars To pluck a pure star, to give, then, to you, Not cold, but bright, like a very small sun. Spotting them through mists, counting them in dew To pluck a pure star, to give just to you To know you’ve a friend in skies of dark blue There are so many, and I am but one To pluck a pure star, to give just to you, Not cold, but bright, like a very small sun. ~*~ Sun In rondo of tune, sailing round our sun I leave you the mists, great doors, and pure stars For a poet’s writing is never done In rondo of tune, sailing round our sun That you might now know, we have just begun For within poetry we hide our scars ~ In rondo of tune, sailing round our sun I leave you the mists, great doors, and pure stars ~*~ To all the Poets at Passions ~ Never quit writing! Circa 2003 |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I'm partial to "Mists," with its dark passages, including the Moors, which we all know is a threatening place. But a poets' zeal has conquered and tamed. Actually, "Doors" would be my choice as the number one poem of the three. How can it not when each door opened with a new view, and views that lead to the stars? Magnificent. Naw. Heck. It is "Sun" that kicks the others out of first place. Taking all the others to task, how can they compete with "Sun" when "For within poetry we hide our scars." Amazing. We have three first place winners. Mind blogging. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Ms. K I like them all, and how they connect to each other, but I like the "stars" triolet best. This is a very fun form to play with, I have tried a few, but never connected several like this...very nice...:-) "Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance." |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
v. fine 'writing' ! ... I'm so glad you brought this back for folks like me that hadn't read it previously. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is absolutely magical, dear Karilea. You were in a state of grace when you wrote this. No, may we never stop to soar with words. Wonderful. Margherita |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie....these triolets are so beautifully done and so full of love. You made me tear up, you did!  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow... Beautiful, just beautiful. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Had to look up Triolets. Knew I couldn't write them but wanted to know what "Them" was... I agree with Jerry...Mists is my favorite but all are beautiful... j. |
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