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Michael

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0 posted 2012-03-15 03:20 PM

The Waiting

'Twas love, I thought, but soon forgot
As wrought, that binding ties don't last.
Severed and torn, to turn forlorn
And shorn from the shadow it cast.
To search for sun in anyone,
'Cept one forever held in heart...
If, in love's name, to pass the blame
And shame for lives I ripped apart.

Restitution... disillusion,
Fusion cannot meld thoughts as such.
I turn away to face the day,
But pray this one I'll forget her touch.
At crepuscule, in ridicule,
To fuel the pyre till bone greets ash...
And curse the sky, wondering why
With sigh, I walked alone from crash.

With feral moan, the undertone,
(A drone of midnight chasing day);
The soft winds stir a voice of her
To blur this life I dream away.
Yet still sleep burns, by toss, by turn,
To learn each nigh spent with a stranger
In Mourning's hold, with grief untold,
But coldy breeds onslaughts of anger.

And still love's lght obscures my sight,
Till right I cannot till from wrong.
Bereft and stark, dismayed and dark,
I mark the hours wth my song...
My blade to wield, my crest in field,
I yield to Misery, and her crown;
In dreams, forsaken, to awaken
Shaken by the hopes I've laid down.

And though the sorow of tomorrow
Harrows for me the death of will,
I trudge on, riven, unforgiven...
Livin' life from the windowsill.
I watch and wait, and yes, tempt fate
For sating I have never known.
For love, indeed, I need... I bleed;
But waiting for, will die here, alone.

Michael Anderson

JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-03-15 03:28 PM

A forlorn and sad piece of work, but then, that is you, Michael, forever the pessimist. Not complaining. I used to be this way, and wrote this way, but in my case it was me I was chastising, not the other way around. I still maintain that true love is one heartbeat away.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

katahdin
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2 posted 2012-03-15 08:12 PM

Love this heart breaking poem. I especially like how you did your rhymes in threes. Enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

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where insanity meets breeding

3 posted 2012-03-15 10:20 PM

oh Michael, how stunning. And some parts of this hit so close to home

I yield to Misery, and her crown;
In dreams, forsaken, to awaken
Shaken by the hopes I've laid down

I hate yielding... yet sometimes, there's no choice

Wonderful piece of writing

JL
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Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2012-03-16 05:14 AM

I wanted to pull-out so many lines to comment on, but I almost had the entire write copied.
This is a devastating, informative, sad, heart pounding read.

The last verse is "The Waiting" perfectly summed up.

"Livin' life from the windowsill.
I watch and wait, and yes, tempt fate
For sating I have never known.
For love, indeed, I need... I bleed;
But waiting for, will die here, alone."

Beautifully done, Michael.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

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Florida

5 posted 2012-03-16 06:42 AM

"But waiting for, will die here, alone"

No
... I think not...

ebonygirl
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6 posted 2012-03-16 09:12 AM

Your poems are written so well ... the message enhanced by the rhyme. I hope you will be blessed with a wonderful person. Ms. E

Kit McCallum

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7 posted 2012-03-18 01:36 PM

The rhyme scheme throughout is so intricately woven Michael. Beautiful job of seamlessly drawing me through the lines, only to return for another read to appreciate the intricacy of the pattern. Well done,much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
Kit

suthern

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8 posted 2012-03-19 03:20 PM

Bereft and stark, dismayed and dark,
I mark the hours wth my song...

And what an incredible song it is! You know I'm loving this magnificent rhyme! *S* I can't imagine anyone else attempting it... much less succeeding so beautifully! *S*

Sad and poignant perfection!!

jwesley
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Spring, Texas

9 posted 2012-03-20 09:23 AM

You rhyme so well and unforced, my friend, you almost make it seem easy - until I look at the mess inside my head when I even think the word "rhyme".

enjoyed.

j.

bel1e
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10 posted 2012-03-20 06:58 PM

The quiet despair in this....so well penned, Michael...

Michael

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11 posted 2012-03-21 11:37 AM

I thank you all for the kind replies... and I apologize for not having the time to respond to each one individually. Please know they are all very much appreciated.

Michael

Tracey
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12 posted 2012-03-21 06:54 PM

love the soft resignation of this, such a sad sentiment, but so beautifully written

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