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The River Red
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The River Red |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
THE RIVER RED Immortals thirst to quench Others queasy, stomach clench A finger drop, a puncture splay Some faint at its display The crimson flow Be it thick and slow Or anemic, pale and thin Liquid ruby or vermilion Pusling quick or slow Tide rising high or low Thickly coursing thru So dark the hue The scarlet wealth Is life it self The heart bled The river red [This message has been edited by katahdin (03-10-2012 07:02 AM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Interestingly created and very well constructed, Kat. I had figured out what the red river was before I read to the end, but it had me going for a while. Good stuff. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Thanks Jerry! I guess you figured out that it was something that I work with at my job as a Lab Tech- Blood! Kat >^..^< |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Like Jerry said "well construted" But when I read it it sounded like something to do with vampires.. Now that I know, it fits the lab tech, blood theme well...:-) Well done, Kat "Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance." Carl Sandburg |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
It gives much to think about. Pip will not permit me to email you... The link is there, but clicking has no effect and will not open it. I wanted to send you a poem to go with your Daddy's Goose but I'll see what I can do? Waves of crinson Jaime |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Enjoyed Kat, kind of hypnotizing, this "river red". Ms. E |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
They say that the saline concentration in our sweat, blood and tears is the same as that in seawater. The Ocean, the cradle and incubus of life, thus resides in our bodies, its rhythms and its ebb and flowing its beating waves and moods and tides; its summer and winter, its automn and springtime, its morning and night. There is something very elemental and in a way passionate in the poem because it is, like you say, the blood, the inflow and outflow, the breating the surging and pulsating of blood, the water of life itself. And red, the color of life itself!!! Now I better send this before it gets eaten again ... |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Hey Daddy - you got it just right! Kat >^..^< |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
mmmmmmmmmmWAH, karen' MMMMM-mwah xoxox Jaime |
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Ron63 Junior Member
since 2012-03-18
Posts 49Suffolk, Eng, UK |
I like to words and visual shape of this poem. It comes across as a smooth read. [This message has been edited by Ron63 (03-18-2012 05:26 PM).] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed the descriptiveness of this Kat, and the direction this piece took. I found it doubly intriguing to subsequently read of your lab tech correlation. Nicely penned.  Best wishes, Kit |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Thanks Ron63 and Kit for stopping by and your comments are greatly welcomed. Kat >^..^< |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Kat, this is good. You poetry always has a pull to it and pulls me right in. I think you are one heck of a writer and I lked this one a lot. A |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Thanks Alison!! I like your poems too! Kat >^..^< |
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