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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-03-09 11:19 AM

Shock is the house drink
as I bellied up to the bar.
I tasted my apprehension
and I choked on paranoia.
I tossed off a shot glass
of wondering that curled
my toes. Speculation ran
rampant as I checked my
crystal ball of possibilities.
Finally I downed a glass
of fear and sat alone in the
corner of my trepidation.

©March 9, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2012-03-09 11:47 AM

The imagery is sharp
in a blue room
filled with grays.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-03-09 11:51 AM

Thank you Karilea for your positive comment. I appreciate your input.

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JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2012-03-09 12:09 PM

Sounds like a scary place to be.
Nice write of the situation.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-03-09 12:17 PM

Yep. Scary is the correct word for "Foreboding," JL. Thank you for being here.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2012-03-09 12:38 PM

It is always darkest before the light my friend

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-03-09 12:44 PM

The dark scares me though.

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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2012-03-09 06:01 PM

hello jerry, i can see in the crystal ball too, its says it is wonderful, enjoyed a lot the poem,

yann

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2012-03-09 06:34 PM

Thanks, yann, I appreciate it.

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katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

9 posted 2012-03-09 09:05 PM

Nicely captured! Seems to be a lot of poems going to the dark side lately from many poets here.
Kat >^..^<

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2012-03-09 09:09 PM

Yeah, it does that, Kat. Could be that full moon we had a day or so ago. Thank you for stopping by and commenting.

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suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2012-03-13 06:36 PM

Hard-hitting images, depicting a place of dread no one wants to visit. I hope things are better for you now... great write!!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2012-03-13 06:44 PM

Hi suthern, thank you for stopping by. Oh sure, things are much better these days.

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