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oceanvu2
Senior Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 1066
Santa Monica, California, USA

0 posted 2012-02-28 01:32 AM

My mirror lies.  It must.  I am not old.
Time lies.  Not being bound by what I see
With ease I look away from glass and hold
to youth informed and vital in my memory,
Time lies.  It must.  To look on you with eyes
That strip away the memory, cut to bone,
Is much the harsher mirror, but I find
Sweet comfort not to face time’s lies alone.
How then can we be old?  So long as hearts
Inform, lies of time and mirrors hold
No sway.  We know our youth anew and start
each day with sweeter lies by lovers told.
In life and death, I hold you so, as Spring,
And curse all temporal and sere imaginings.

There is a bit of a jest in here which someone will probably ferret out.

Best, Jimbeaux

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2012-02-28 07:25 AM

You always were a bit over my head.

You've been on my mind, much, lately.

And I've decided that I will stop saying that I can't write sonnets, and just say that I won't. So it'll seem like a preference.

But other people's seem to read so nicely.

and as for the topic? I put my make up on with a compact. My eyes are really sexy. Have no idea what the rest of me looks like.

Now CAMERAS? Those are devices of deceit. (Remind me to tell you the story about the Karen and Spike Lee photo argument...)

Miss you much, and it's good to see ya around.

Enjoyed.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2012-02-28 09:18 AM

So long as hearts
Inform, lies of time and mirrors hold
No sway.

I love this.

There's something immensely beautiful about a couple seeing each other through a love that's always young, no matter how many wrinkles line their faces.

oceanvu2
Senior Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 1066
Santa Monica, California, USA

3 posted 2012-02-28 11:01 AM

Hi Serenity -- Probably better over your head than under your thumb...

Been a long year away, part time out and part trying to come up with some cabbage. No matter how simply we try to live, Social Security doesn't quite get it. Blaargh.

Hi Suthern -- I'm glad the lines resonated with you. Our 50th high school graduation year is coming up, so I'm seeing a lot of pictures of friends. Boy, did they age! My wife Deb does in fact seem not to age. Me, I've been old and kind of creepy since I was about 10...

Best to all, Jimbeaux

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2012-02-28 11:36 AM

i seem to be having as much trouble understanding your replies as I do your poetry...

just thought I'd say hey.

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

5 posted 2012-02-28 07:38 PM

I wish..wish wish, that I could hear meter like others do. My mind forces things to fit where they shouldn't, and that is messy. I liked the sweetness, what I perceived as sly humor... the last line, if SERE means what I think you meant for it to mean, made me chuckle.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2012-02-28 08:44 PM

Excuse me Jimbeaux, but Nic?

"I wish..wish wish, that I could hear meter like others do. My mind forces things to fit where they shouldn't,"

If I can do something with that, do you mind very much if I steal it?

sorry Jb, thx Nic?

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

7 posted 2012-02-28 08:45 PM

Sonnets are hard for me, I have trouble with their strict form, and they never flow like this one..love the theme, love the poem.

and this

"Me, I've been old and kind of creepy since I was about 10..." lol

We seem to be about the same age,Jimbeaux
But I have been creepy since I was eight.

I enjoyed your sonnet...and your jesting.

"It is difficult
to get the news from poems
yet men die miserably every day
for lack of what is found there"
(William Carlos Williams)

The_Doctors_Angel_32
Member

since 2011-01-14

Posts 337
Florida, USA

8 posted 2012-02-28 10:11 PM

This is a really cool poem to me. Nobody likes what the mirror tells them. Also sometimes what the mirror tells them can help them. At least that is what I got out of this poem.

When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

9 posted 2012-02-29 06:28 AM

lol K by all means, m'lady

Grinch
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since 2005-12-31

Posts 2929
Whoville

10 posted 2012-02-29 07:31 AM

quote:
There is a bit of a jest in here which someone will probably ferret out.

The title.

oceanvu2
Senior Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 1066
Santa Monica, California, USA

11 posted 2012-02-29 09:52 AM

Ah Grinch, you make me feel like I've come back home. Unfortunately, that's somewhat like going back to New Jersey.

Thank you all for taking a moment with this.

Best, Jimbeaux

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