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Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2012-02-27 11:47 AM


you said that needful things were not
the most fashionable of items, but wrapped
the scarf around us anyway - since you liked
how i looked when nothing mattered;
and hid the knot so that i wouldn't find it
but instead found you blanketed around me
heavy and quiet

so heavy, was this tightening
and there was no end, to the miles
that ached across my forehead;
or the boundaries and borders that ran
around my ankles, snagged like barbed-wire.
you have known though
all along, about my dark places;
the dirty dark ones, where i am so alone
and wretchedly voiceless.
where i am a woman, starving
breathing you in great swallowing gasps.

so, you take my silence, and press it flat;
then fold it, in planes and valleys
little peaks and wingtips for flight.
a hundred paper cranes,
"they are for luck," you say
"and hope, and love
and love and love."



© Copyright 2012 Nicole Williams - All Rights Reserved
Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
1 posted 2012-02-27 12:08 PM


Ms Nitch...I just spilled a full cup of cherish all over your little red cape. I do have a bucket full of needful if ya want to get your sand shovel and join me.  
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2012-02-27 12:24 PM


Suffocating is the only thing which came to mind here, Nicole. When you go dark, you GO dark. I know about the dark ones when they go to dirty dark, and they are survival. I know they are. I am still here. There is no cure-all, but start by forgiving yourself, the rest more or less falls in place behind that offering.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2012-02-27 12:46 PM


Your best so far, my friend.  Very, very much enjoyed and don't know that I'd call it dark so much as needful, white-knight yearning.

And love.

j.

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida
4 posted 2012-02-28 08:04 AM


D     It's okay, the cape is for sitting on anyway; I have the shovel all the time, I keep it on my keychain.

Jerry; the dark stuff is exactly that, suffocating.  It reduces a person down to nothing but a mindless, reactive mass.  It takes fight to work out of it, and I got a few years of fight left in me.     Thank you

J - thank you dear, it is indeed all of those things.

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
5 posted 2012-02-28 09:55 AM


I love to read your poems outloud.
Love the way your language flows,
the rhythm always matching the theme.

"so, you take my silence, and press it flat;
then fold it, in planes and valleys
little peaks and wingtips for flight.
a hundred paper cranes.."

That is music when you bring it to life by sounding out the words.

enjoyed

"It is difficult
to get the news from poems
yet men die miserably every day
for lack of what is found there"
(William Carlos Williams)

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
6 posted 2012-02-29 01:40 AM


Your heart is showing...

You need not worry, if you know there is a task ahead,
then you have a plan, maybe day-to-day,
but the realization that you can pivot a different direction is always a good
start to completion.  Love the struggle.
It builds character.

JL  
  

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

katahdin
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
7 posted 2012-02-29 02:05 AM


Wow! Gotta let the dark out so you can see the light. Enjoyed.
Kat >^..^<

splashMeadow
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since 2011-06-09
Posts 20
UK
8 posted 2012-02-29 03:41 PM


Words that wrap themselves around our inner darkness  and in so beautifully expressing the essence of it, set us free... the power of poetry; the wonderful lightness of being, lifting up and away from it all in the last verse. A very special poem that i really enjoyed reading... several times over.
Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
9 posted 2012-02-29 09:50 PM


Nicole,

you put dark to light, very well. It's always a pleasure to read your insightful.


Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
10 posted 2012-03-03 12:31 PM


I felt a little suffocated reading this Nicole (perhaps that is the point) but it is still an amazing write.
                              Ida

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