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Open Poetry #48

Flame

MICHELMAS
Member

since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

0 posted 2012-02-27 11:24 AM

Flame

So rare a moth, transluscent wings
To tease the candlelight
How close she dares near dancing flame
What fate this coming night

A shadow there upon the wall
A haunting from the past
And would the flame burn out too soon
Extinguish life at last

And there she sits so very still
Moon shadows touching her
What are the thoughts within her mind
That make emotions stir

And then the dark, burnt wax perfume
The silence of her wings
So will she fly or stay this day
This dawn the answer brings

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-02-27 11:30 AM

Oh, the moth crisis is very well demonstrated within your excellent rhyming pattern.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

2 posted 2012-02-27 11:56 AM

And then the dark, burnt wax perfume
The silence of her wings
So will she fly or stay this day
This dawn the answer brings

There indeed is the question... Very nicely done

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2012-02-27 12:47 PM

Nice.

j.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2012-02-27 04:12 PM

Tender, sensitive and very, very beautiful, Michael.

Owl

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