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MICHELMAS
Member

since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

0 posted 2012-02-23 11:20 AM

Silence in the morning

I am sure I saw you walking
The way you flicked your hair
I am sure I heard you talking
Even though you were not there
I am sure I felt you breathing
Lying there alone
I am sure I said I love you
With anguish now I moan

The silence in the morning
The sun that shone for you
A day of endless thinking
Of good times we once knew
The creeping dark of evening
Those nights now seem so few
Please stay when I am dreaming
Please stay the whole night through

The Blackbird still comes calling
The one you fed to save
The roses now full blooming
The last goodbye your wave
The little things so certain
Until no longer here
Until I draw the curtain
Another day I fear

So many people lonely
So many people cold
The ones who say if only
So many words untold
I love you still my Darling
My plea for you to stay
But Fate that day came calling
And carried you away

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-02-23 12:31 PM

A couple of ways to take this well-written poem. I have my preference and that's that. Sad poetry can still be a delight to read, just ask Edgar Allen Poe, wherever he's gotten off to these days.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2012-02-23 02:46 PM

So many people lonely
So many people cold
The ones who say if only
So many words untold

How very true!! I love this bittersweet beauty of a write! *S*

ponderthepoetorrsx
Member

since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

3 posted 2012-02-23 03:39 PM

good job

yolilitzli

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2012-02-23 03:50 PM

Very beautiful. I am sorry for your loss if she has passed on. If she hasn't, giving her this poem, I am sure would do wonders!

I am glad she saved the blackbird.

As with "Yesterday Again", I had to come back to edit this to express - well, I would have liked it to be empathy, but I have no inkling of how terribly hard this must be - so I will have to settle for sympathy and shared pain, for which currently I have no words.

Owl

[This message has been edited by OwlSA (02-24-2012 04:08 PM).]

MICHELMAS
Member

since 2012-02-15

Posts 305
Lancashire England

5 posted 2012-02-24 06:56 AM

Thanks for your comments.Interpretation is in the mind of the reader as it should be.
Always written from life's experience with truth honesty and emotion
Michael

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