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Open Poetry #48

It's Not a Pretty Memory

Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

0 posted 2012-02-19 01:56 PM

It’s not a pretty memory.

Standing in my bedroom
(a room so dark that even once eyes have adjusted,
no silhouettes are to be seen),
my ear is pressed to the door,
hoping to hear one of my parents say a word that ends with “y”.
To me, a worried ten year old girl,
words that ended with “y” seemed less serious- a bit of a relief.

But those words rarely broke through,
and if they did,
they were repressed and covered by the stomping and banging of feet and limbs in the living room.

I would cry quietly.
I knew that their hands were on each other in a way that wasn’t loving.
I didn’t like it-
But it was normal.

*Amber

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-02-19 02:00 PM

Again, I relate. I never went hungry. I always had clean clothes to wear. I lived in the house my father built with his bare hands in a town straight out of a fifties sitcom (actually I grew up in the fifties), but the undertone and the screaming tone in that house produced a child who had more complexes than was good for him.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2012-02-19 10:51 PM

This was beautifully written my friend (not that it's "beautiful", but meaning the wording), with heart and soul and child helplessness...I know, been there. If I were writing it, I would have wanted my words to be just like yours.

Excellent.

j.

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

3 posted 2012-02-20 10:53 AM

this aches with realism and just good poetry

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2012-02-26 05:05 PM

This is very moving. I just sat here thinking after I read it - charmed by the words ending in "y" and remembering the voices raised in anger. Good job on this poem.

A

Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

5 posted 2012-02-27 10:35 AM

Thank you for your comments, everyone.. Appreciated!

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