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Amberzlynnc
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0 posted 2012-02-19 01:43 PM


I was fighting the clock.
Time was winning
for what seemed like an eternity…
But at the first second of the seventh hour,
I had pulled ahead,
punched out,
got in my car,
and won.

*Amber

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2012-02-19 01:56 PM


I can relate to this one, you beat the eighth hour and was hell-bent for a place where you could kick off your shoes, have a glass of white or red and wind down.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2012-02-19 05:52 PM


when ya 'beat the clock' ... make sure it's truly dead !

Time 'flies' ...
ah no ...
Time stays ...
It's we that 'go' !

Let the clocks run wild
for they know nothing of Time.
Dance while you can, like
‘gypsy-phantoms’ of the mist,
for YOU are ‘flying’, NOT Time!

aujussy wolf
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3 posted 2012-02-21 04:29 PM


A satisfying read, you pulled ahead and beat the clock. A good ending to this little poem.

In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil)

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4 posted 2012-02-23 02:02 PM


Still in the middle of a long day, the clock's winning here... but you give hope!
LOL

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