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Honeybunch
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South Africa

0 posted 2012-02-15 12:52 PM


When a moment comes of no recall
freedom grips the soul
for after all the past is gone
and ne’er will come again.

But just a moment, yes, indeed
for the heart would backward go,
and remember till no break of day
brings the present into play.

With no reins made to tie the sun
down on the other side
each day the heart must learn again
to put the past aside.

It learns each second, minute, hour,
of each long living day
but unlike mind it cannot
ever gain a passing mark.

The heart, therefore, a drop-out
lives to beat to what was good
and the soul just sits and waits
for a moment of freedom!

Helen / 15 February 2012

© Copyright 2012 Helen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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1 posted 2012-02-15 06:00 AM


Very good wordplay in this, a sorta sad plight of the heart and problematic things of the past. Still, it must do its job and deal with the past if there is, indeed, a future to be had.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

MICHELMAS
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since 2012-02-15
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Lancashire England
2 posted 2012-02-15 06:36 AM


really enjoyed this, the feel of a ticking clock, memories of times past.

Michael

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
3 posted 2012-02-15 07:04 PM


"The heart, therefore, a drop-out
lives to beat to what was good
and the soul just sits and waits
for a moment of freedom!"

Yes, but we have a need to experience
something new, so while we wait, we search, we think,
and watch, then we catch the wind
and we fly, and that makes freedom, freedom.
Like the sea birds...



JL



Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Michael
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4 posted 2012-02-17 01:20 AM


Some powerful emotion wrapped up in this one.  A heart forcing itself to move forward even though it aches for something past, and a soul whose only ambition is to be freed of the body enslaving it.  Wow.  All I can say is I can relate to this on a very personal level.  Nicely done.

Michael

Honeybunch
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South Africa
5 posted 2012-02-17 02:11 AM


Thank you all so much!  I'm still getting settled after being away from home for a year but I hope to soon be here more often.

Helen

suthern
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6 posted 2012-02-17 04:12 PM


each day the heart must learn again
to put the past aside.

Oh, how very true - it's Groundhog's Day, over and over and over! I identify strongly with this... and really like it! Excellent write!

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