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Open Poetry #48

Walk in The Park

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2012-02-09 08:02 PM

Between the hairline fractures
in my finely shined veneer
Get a grip hangs on for dear life
lest I slip and shatter into
all the pieces I possess
of me that I know
I don't show society
For surely under scrutiny
it would question my sanity
My crumble would be swept
under a crazy carpet of congeniality
My down and dirty shook loose
out the backdoor cleaning day
Scattered again to the wind
the rest hidden from company
When time comes for me
and takes me apart
make a mosaic and walk on me
in the park

LGR(C)2/9/12

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-02-09 08:16 PM

What a fantastic piece of writing, Lori. You never cease to amaze me.

Lady put an ad in the classifieds: 'Husband Wanted'.
Next day she received a hundred letters.
They all said the same thing: 'You can have mine'

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2012-02-09 08:19 PM

Thanks Jerry I'm pretty sure the feeling is mutual my friend.

Lori

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2012-02-11 05:21 AM

My crumble would be swept
under a crazy carpet of congeniality

Incredible imagery in this emotion filled poetic piece, Lori!

Swept me off my feet ...

Margherita

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2012-02-11 10:18 AM

Thank you so much Margherita! I consider that very very high praise coming from you.
Thank you for letting me know my whine didn't overload my ability to write. Bless your heart.

Hugs Lori

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