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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2012-01-29 12:50 PM

some would say that, want, is a feather
floating listlessly through an empty belly
tickling the sides into rumbles;
a little bit of forshadow, a preamble
to the gnawing growl that comes
at 2am on nights like this

those times when pictures are no longer fat
and full of life, and hope
but flat, worn, dried-out things;
perhaps a bit of purple ink, smeared
to suffer the virgin canvas
or a vapid smile, wafting like wet smoke.
it is every little desire, stretched taut

a bubble, trapped; shimmering and fragile
a burst, waiting for the wind to change direction.

want, is infinite and translucent
and i would paint it up, pretty for showtimes;
but under the dust cake, it is a lump of
grey clay, no more alive than i

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2012-01-29 01:24 PM

VERY good writing/fine imagery !!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-01-29 02:06 PM

Taking on the outward appearances and the inner demons in a provocative and truthful way. Delightful reading even though nastynasty . . .

~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2012-01-29 03:35 PM

Ms Nicole...wanting and kneading they say are the same, if done right.

Pleasing to read lady

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2012-01-29 04:18 PM

..."a vapid smile, wafting like wet smoke.
it is every little desire, stretched taut

a bubble, trapped; shimmering and fragile
a burst, waiting for the wind to change direction."

I love how a good poets mind can see past the skin of life, exposing the muscle, and bone of it in metaphor...like you have done here.:-)

well done Nicole

[This message has been edited by ice (01-30-2012 08:07 AM).]

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

5 posted 2012-01-30 03:52 AM

Oh this is fantastic Nicole, well done!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 2012-01-31 11:19 AM

"Want is infinite and translucent"

Great line that. Want is also the little sister of Emptiness, but not many know that... they run hand-in-hand through they playground and change everyone they touch. Have to be careful around them two.

Your imagery is wonderful, btw.

Michael

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

7 posted 2012-02-01 08:08 AM

shdp - Thank you!

Jerry - Painting it up for showtimes, yes. Thank you

D - Yeah, that's the trick - don't think I've figured it out yet.

ice - I like to see things inside-out, too. Such a high compliment, thank you

tracie66 - Thanks hon!

Michael - She is indeed; chaotic little buggers. Thank you for your unending support.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2012-02-01 11:19 PM

"a bubble, trapped; shimmering and fragile
a burst, waiting for the wind to change direction."

Ah, the imagery in this write is
a wanting for the touch of it.
It's fantastic.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

9 posted 2012-02-05 02:29 PM

Wondeful. I see want as a balloon after all the air has spewed out and it lies, wrinkled and forgotten, on the floor. Love this, Nicole.

A

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

10 posted 2012-02-05 03:42 PM

Showing your poetic genius again, Nicole. fascinating.
Ida

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

11 posted 2012-02-07 06:28 PM

The podium always stands a little straighter when you step down, my friend.

Enjoyed.

j.

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

12 posted 2012-02-08 07:54 PM

JL - wanting for the touch of it...that's perfect.

Alison - That is how it feels sometimes, thank you so much for seeing it.

Ida - Thank you, very much

J - (hugs) Thank you, friend...I'm speechless

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

13 posted 2012-02-08 08:32 PM

Stunning imagery, dear Nicole. You master the theme with perfect elegance.

Margherita

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

14 posted 2012-02-12 12:28 PM

Boy, Nicole, the "want" you describe I see is as thick as clay and not alive at this time, but may eventually change... Wonderful poetry.
Ms. E

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

15 posted 2012-02-12 01:33 PM

Hi Nicole,
My first comment didn't post, don't know why, so I'll try again. Your poetry is wonderful, love your description of want.
Ms. E

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2012-02-17 11:20 AM

And then there are times when it seethes and writhes and roars and will not die or even rest or be quiet... and I fear for the fragile shell trying to contain it. *S*

Your lines are so vivid and visual... I FELT the words as much as I read them!

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