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LeeJ
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0 posted 2012-01-27 07:59 AM



the dove
soft, quiet, reserved,
her coo, whispering a lazy discern
her eye lids flutter contentment
like a cloudless blue sky drifting
or' the calm playful glance of being

for a while I sleep & dream
a strawberry taste, the energy
bubbling a giggle thru the living room
sea breeze whispering thru my curtains
paying it forward
till sun sets, creeping over still waters

I love the dark, right before sun rise
Can you feel the quiet
there is a comforting stillness…
which plays the soul like soft music
a sort of waning…alone, but never lonely
that I so love…

hunting for shells along the shore
of some endless beach
walking through
an open bay window into
crisp morning light
unfurling wings of earthy breathe
perspective along a moonlit road
disappears into endless white
such a creative kindred spirit
utterly irresistible
this Jamaican road
with a sideways shift
evolving…

© Copyright 2012 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
1 posted 2012-01-27 08:02 AM


Oh WOW! I didn't want this to end, love the vivid imagery it conjures - thank you!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                        — W. E. Channing

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2012-01-27 08:47 AM


Great wordplay and stunning local color, feeling as if I was there beside you as you walked that beach toward that "sideways shift / evolving…"

~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2012-01-27 10:24 AM


Reading you again is wonderful, my friend.  You've been missed in these pages.

Was walking with you here...

j.

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376
Midwest
4 posted 2012-01-27 10:31 AM


this is rich, i really enjoyed
Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2012-01-27 05:05 PM


Wonderful imagery, Lee. Quite a reading experience.
                                   Ida

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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6 posted 2012-01-29 06:34 PM


grand-fine imagery !

I am especially fond of the lines:

"Can you feel the quiet
  there is a comforting stillness…
  which plays the soul like soft music"

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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7 posted 2012-01-30 02:27 PM


quote:
like a cloudless blue sky drifting
or' the calm playful glance of being


Stunningly beautiful, dear LeeJ! "Glance of being" ... wow, I love it!

Margherita

suthern
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8 posted 2012-01-31 02:22 PM


I love the dark, right before sun rise
Can you feel the quiet
there is a comforting stillness…
which plays the soul like soft music
a sort of waning…alone, but never lonely
that I so love…

Some of mine are lonely... those that aren't, are wonderful. *S* And so is this poem! *S*

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
9 posted 2012-02-01 11:06 PM


You.... you make me breathless with your
poetic words and stories.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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