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Under the Devilish Moon
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Under the Devilish Moon |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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flavor of a lingering kiss her breath slightly sour'd a probing tongue her eyes furtively shifting here and yon informing me she'd blend into the shadows and not cause trouble I held onto her like she was the last thread on the forgiving cord of a life sour'd free falling struggling for breath eyes gazing into the dark, wondering where life leads next anticipation. leery to learn where all the pieces fit. I've shared much with her things not voiced to another it's that kind of a love ©January 21, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (01-26-2012 08:27 AM).] |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
There is a saddness here I would not have expected...Hope things are well with you my friend.  Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Everything is okay here. Sometimes sad poems just pop up. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Intimate and subtly dark....niiice spill, Mr. Pat! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Baby Girl. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Let it out! Man, you are really writing some great poetry, Jerry. Love this line: "I've shared much with her things not voiced to another it's that kind of a love" This is excellent!! Enjoyed... JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Passionate! I couldn't pick a favorite line because I loved the whole poem! Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Kat, I'm proud you liked my poem. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
JL beat me to the words, my friend...those are a piece all in themselves... Enjoyed the 'saddness' in you... j. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
JL beat me to the words, my friend...those are a piece all in themselves... Enjoyed the 'saddness' in you... j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you so much, j. Yeah, that darn JL, he beats me to the good stuff regularly. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
one hell of a write, enjoyed! Love is the life of the soul... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I like bold statements like the one you just gave for the contents of this poem. Thank you, tracie66. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
v. fine, effective writing indeed ! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Much appreciated comment, secondhanddreampoet, thank you. ~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~ |
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