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Let me be the One

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SlowlyFallAway
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0 posted 12-31-2010 12:18 AM       View Profile for SlowlyFallAway   Email SlowlyFallAway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for SlowlyFallAway

Your features complement you well
The complexion of your face
That look inside your eyes
Your affection never fails
To show that side of fear
We all try desperately to hide
Behind assumed assurance and expected confidence
When being yourself
Seems like a touchy subject
You'd rather just avoid
Because you've been hurt one too many times
And one more broken promise
Could destroy your last thread of trust
Believe me
This is conventional
And as inconvenient as it may seem
I need you to listen when I say,
"You're all I need"
Now that we've involved ourselves in each others thoughts
Processing each dilemma
As if it were our own
You're more than just a shallow commitment
Or another of my failed intentions
With such delicate devotions
And intricate emotions
I'd be proud to be the featured lover
Who you compliment so well


Emily Shives
December 31st 2010

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ethome
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since 05-14-2000
Posts 11545
New Brunswick Canada


1 posted 12-31-2010 06:21 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Emily
This is a beautiful expression of emotions from the inside out.

I thought this was really good and oh so true...
"When being yourself
Seems like a touchy subject
You'd rather just avoid
Because you've been hurt one too many times
And one more broken promise
Could destroy your last thread of trust
Believe me
This is conventional
And as inconvenient as it may seem
I need you to listen when I say,
"You're all I need""

Good work!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Dark Stranger
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since 03-19-2001
Posts 13647
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2 posted 12-31-2010 06:55 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

almost written to god...enjoyed it ms
JerryPat
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since 10-30-2010
Posts 1985
Louisiana/America


3 posted 12-31-2010 07:12 AM       View Profile for JerryPat   Email JerryPat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat

Like the positive outlook this poem has to offer the reader. Although there are darker tones throughout the gist of the poem is optimism. Excellent work.

To mimic is a form of praise unless
you have no thoughts of your own

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 12-31-2010 07:25 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

You really nailed this one. Excellent!
Lori
 
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